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Lord Voldemort
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PostSubject: *A MUST READ* Poem.   Mon Nov 19, 2012 8:25 pm

My heart was once filled with joy, happiness, and light.
Most of all, light.
It shone brighter everyday that I lived, regardless of the setting of the sun.
I've tried and tried, with no success
I'm sick and tired, I'm broken.
I know they say,
"If you put your mind to it, you can conquer anything!"
But no, it's not like that anymore.
The walls are closing in, and then it hits me,
it's a race, a race for maturity.
Without it, you're looked down upon,
and with it everyone tries to get out of your line of vision.
My heart skips a beat, then it begins to speed up, i'm falling into my own hole of pity and despair. Strength is no longer a word in my vocabulary
The world is foreign.
I'm slowly being defeated.


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PostSubject: Re: *A MUST READ* Poem.   Mon Nov 19, 2012 8:31 pm

Its a nice poem. 7/10
Edited this to make it look like a poem:
 
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I have no idea how to explain this but I read it as someone talking, not a poem.
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PostSubject: Re: *A MUST READ* Poem.   Mon Nov 19, 2012 8:36 pm

Clockwork Nightmare wrote:
Its a nice poem. 7/10
Edited this to make it look like a poem:
 
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I have no idea how to explain this but I read it as someone talking, not a poem.

Thank you, it's so kind of you BUT, this is how I actually feel. I'm pretty sad.
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PostSubject: Re: *A MUST READ* Poem.   Mon Nov 19, 2012 8:42 pm

Nice poem, I like how it's pretty detailed. 7.8/10
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PostSubject: Re: *A MUST READ* Poem.   Mon Nov 19, 2012 8:51 pm

it is a very good poem!!! but keep in mind if u try to act mature ppl will like u less. srry, its the truth. just be u!!!!!!1 cheers


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PostSubject: Re: *A MUST READ* Poem.   Mon Nov 19, 2012 8:54 pm

ᗪeepest~ßlue wrote:
Clockwork Nightmare wrote:
Its a nice poem. 7/10
Edited this to make it look like a poem:
 
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I have no idea how to explain this but I read it as someone talking, not a poem.

Thank you, it's so kind of you BUT, this is how I actually feel. I'm pretty sad.
I understand. I feel that way too.

Maybe use more metaphors, make it sound indirect. That's the key to poems, even if they are first person, they sound indirect. I wanna write one too. XDD
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PostSubject: Re: *A MUST READ* Poem.   Wed Nov 21, 2012 8:52 pm

Wow. This poem is sad.
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PostSubject: Re: *A MUST READ* Poem.   Thu Nov 22, 2012 9:19 am

ᗪeepest~ßlue wrote:
Clockwork Nightmare wrote:

Edited this to make it look like a poem:
 
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I have no idea how to explain this but I read it as someone talking, not a poem.

Thank you, it's so kind of you BUT, this is how I actually feel. I'm pretty sad.
Ikr thats like, everyday of my life until i touch the mouse on my computer! lolz
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PostSubject: Re: *A MUST READ* Poem.   Thu Nov 22, 2012 5:30 pm

I'm glad I related to all of you guys! That was what I was trying to get at, we all have our up's and down's and in the end we will fall. But now we should just gain our maturity and live while we're young.. Okay.. the live while we're young part wasn't in the poem..
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