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PostSubject: Failed Anime Attempt   Sat Dec 08, 2012 1:00 pm

Got a tablet last night, and new computer, so I drew Neru today.
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Critique and Rate please. I really want to draw anime style.
I want critique ONLY on the atomy however you spell it, I don't want to hear a THING about the shading or coloring, I was lazy.
I know there are lots of flaws and there is a white line, so don't bug me please.
I got lazy and forgot to color in her belly too.
Oh yeah, I like ringed eyes, and the shading on THAT, I would like help on. Thanks.
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Sat Dec 08, 2012 1:06 pm

The body is pretty awkward, and the arms shouldn't look like that. The neck is pretty long, but its really nice!
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Sat Dec 08, 2012 1:06 pm

Necks aren't supposed to be that long..Don't understand random white around the eyes. Chin is too pointy, the eyes and the mouth are straight, but the head is on an angle.. It looks out of place. Uh.. She has no eyelashes? Grim expression.. Facial details? But it's good for a first try. I recommend traditional drawing, once you master that then you could move on to the tablet.. Please don't take offense to this?
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Sat Dec 08, 2012 1:11 pm

wHAT WHAT WHAT THAT IS NOT FAILED.
Her hair and her eyes looks really good,and you did pretty fine on the anatomy.
You draw anime WAYYYYYY better than me,so in my opinion I would give you a 9.6/10
i am so sorry my critiques are really bad i dont know much about art asdfghjkl;
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Sat Dec 08, 2012 1:23 pm

Woah you draw with a mouse only, right? I'm going to post like a whole essay here. u_u

I think her head/chin is too much like a triangle. I understand that her face needs shape like everything else, but I think you shaped it too much. Even if you aren't trying to draw a particular round face, you should at least round it a bit. Here's a few good refs of nice faces if you need them- {x} {x}
As for ears, I suggest looking up a ton of refs (even use google images because those will be your best friend) since I can't draw ears to save my life. I usually just do blobs somewhat similar to the shape of an ear but they're horrible so don't listen to me on that.
You can see her hair coming from her ponytail on the side, but the rest of her body, including her face is facing forward? If you're going to draw her hair like that, you're going to need to draw the rest of the body like that, too. uvu
Her neck is skinny and long. You've got the shape of it down, which is great, but it kinda resembles a straw. Like I said, just look up tons of references--since you're going from an anime style, it would be good to see what kind of anime style you're looking for (if you get what I'm trying to say uuu)? Like, there's lots of different anime styles. In these pictures, they're all different, and when it comes to drawing, you're going to end up incorporating your own style into it as well. Here's some examples of different styles - {x} {x} {x} {x}
There's a ton more anime-based styles, but there are just a few (and my favourites actually haha).
Let's move onto her arms and shoulders. Considering the size of everything else, I think her shoulders a good size. However, her arms are like noodles. Stick out your arms and look at them. I'm positive they aren't wiggly and curvy like that. If you need to (since google images doesn't always have what you're looking for), take a picture of yourself or your sister or someone else modelling a pose you want to do and then look at it as a reference. That's what I do when I draw hands all the time--I take a picture of my hands and study them. I know you're not aiming for realism, but sometimes realism contains a lot of basics for almost any style.
Her breasts kinda go in every direction. Like I said, even though you might find it awkward or something--go on google images and look at references on how they should fall. They don't bounce around in every direction (unless you're a hentai artist or something), they fall naturally. Since you can see the hair in her ponytail, her boobs should be facing left (her right). And they boobs on the right (her left) wouldn't be very noticeable in that position, unless they were huge.
Her waist is stick thin. Adding curves is an important (and tricky!) part of drawing. Without them, she either looks like a stick with no figure, or some noodle moving each and every way.
Oh-- I just noticed this, but her facial features are facing the right way! That was a tricky part for me to learn (and I still can't even do it right), and you're off to a great start! I know that you only use a mouse, and this is fantastic for a mouse drawing! I think you have a lot of potential, and if you keep drawing for a while-- who knows? You're going to constantly get better and better the more you practice.

Oh and on a side note @Swimmer you don't need to add eyelashes to every drawing. I've seen people draw females without large/visible eyelashes and it looks fine. If I can, I'll some examples. Also, the white circles in her eyes are the shine/glare, if you look in some of the examples I posted you'll see it's visible, though it isn't always white. For example if someone colours an eye brown, they can use a light yellow or even a dark purple with some effects on it (like multiply/overlay on SAI and photoshop).

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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Sat Dec 08, 2012 1:32 pm

Thank you everyone I appreciate all the feedback you gave me UwU
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Sat Dec 08, 2012 1:39 pm

Clockwork Invention wrote:
Got a tablet last night, and new computer, so I drew Neru today.

Len, she's using a tablet. I know that I already critiqued but I would like to rate this 7/10. It's nice for a beginner.
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Sat Dec 08, 2012 1:40 pm

Ғaith wrote:
Clockwork Invention wrote:
Got a tablet last night, and new computer, so I drew Neru today.

Len, she's using a tablet. I know that I already critiqued but I would like to rate this 7/10. It's nice for a beginner.
Whoops heh I didn't see that. uvu
@Darkmanor are you using SAI or ps? Becuase I can give you some tips on SAI to make your lines smoother, if you want. o:

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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Sun Dec 09, 2012 4:09 pm

@Len Photoshop. Lol
Thank you everyone.

And I made a new picture. Its MUCH better
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Sun Dec 09, 2012 4:14 pm

That is so amazing Very Happy
Good job (To both of your drawings)
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Sun Dec 09, 2012 4:35 pm

Bravo! This is good. c:
P.S. That's just all I could say.
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Sun Dec 09, 2012 4:41 pm

Your first drawing looks pretty good! One thing is the tie. It's kind of big.

For your second drawing, you made some great progress!
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Sun Dec 09, 2012 5:53 pm

Ahh~ that's really nice! There's so much improvement! C: Would you mind if I critiqued it?

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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Sun Dec 09, 2012 5:58 pm

-Oogles at it- The second drawing is really good! If I may ask, how much time did it take for you to do that?
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Sun Dec 09, 2012 6:00 pm

I love your next drawing, much better with the proportion. 8/10

All I can say is that your drawings are a bit too thin. I mean, make her belly a little wider?
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Mon Dec 10, 2012 8:10 pm

Thank you everyone ^.^
@Swimmer a few hours. I'm too lazy to calculate time
@Len Sure feel free to critique
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Mon Dec 10, 2012 9:44 pm

10/10 it was so not a fail
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Mon Dec 10, 2012 9:46 pm

Ok heres my critque for the neru one: The chin is too pointy, and the neck is too long and too thin. The hair is kinda tilted but the body is facing foward. The tiny body kinda bothers me, but if you like It then ignore that >_>. And the tie is too big. But i really like the eyes and hair! I give it a 8/10 For the miku one: the only thing is the shoulders are kinda low so 9/10. You did a good job!
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Mon Dec 10, 2012 9:48 pm

Thank you everyone =D
I'll upload this new drawing o just finished later :>
@Wafflefries lol the body is small because I'm used to drawing chibis XDD
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Mon Dec 10, 2012 9:52 pm

I really like the second one! The first one has to much pointed edges and stuff (as the others said) 8/10 for the first and 9/10 for the second
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Mon Dec 10, 2012 9:54 pm

I don't like the first one. I like the second one.
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Mon Dec 10, 2012 10:04 pm

Thank you everyone ^.^
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PostSubject: Re: Failed Anime Attempt   Wed Dec 12, 2012 3:06 am

You draw VERY good.(For a begginer(sp?) )
I will critique the second one.

First,her neck is a bit...long try to make it shorter.
Her shoulder's look like a guy's shoulder,make it petit.
Her breasts are ... uneven.

You could search tutorials in DA.
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