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Mr.Noah
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PostSubject: Story made by Noah~Odd Adventure   Mon Jan 07, 2013 8:07 pm

2nd story ever woohoo Okay lets start with the Prologue:

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Chapter 1:The cemetery
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Chapter 2
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PostSubject: Re: Story made by Noah~Odd Adventure   Tue Jan 08, 2013 5:31 am

Its pretty nice~
Well, Hope to read more~
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PostSubject: Re: Story made by Noah~Odd Adventure   Tue Jan 08, 2013 5:15 pm

Miku wrote:
Its pretty nice~
Well, Hope to read more~

Thank youuu Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Story made by Noah~Odd Adventure   Tue Jan 08, 2013 5:23 pm

Its good but you need to improve the grammar and a little of past, present and future tense maybe.

Just to be clear. Is it supposed to be the serious kind of writing or like if the girl (Jamie) is writing it on her diary?
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PostSubject: Re: Story made by Noah~Odd Adventure   Tue Jan 08, 2013 5:26 pm

Lin wrote:
Its good but you need to improve the grammar and a little of past, present and future tense maybe.

Just to be clear. Is it supposed to be the serious kind of writing or like if the girl (Jamie) is writing it on her diary?

1)I don't care about my grammar as long as you can read it its fine with me.

2)Yes,shes writing in her diary telling us her experiences,
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PostSubject: Re: Story made by Noah~Odd Adventure   Tue Jan 08, 2013 5:35 pm

Noah wrote:
Lin wrote:
Its good but you need to improve the grammar and a little of past, present and future tense maybe.

Just to be clear. Is it supposed to be the serious kind of writing or like if the girl (Jamie) is writing it on her diary?

1)I don't care about my grammar as long as you can read it its fine with me.

2)Yes,shes writing in her diary telling us her experiences,

You should work on your grammar though, since I'm a grammar freak and its quite annoying when I read bad grammar.
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PostSubject: Re: Story made by Noah~Odd Adventure   Tue Jan 08, 2013 5:36 pm

Lin wrote:
Noah wrote:
Lin wrote:
Its good but you need to improve the grammar and a little of past, present and future tense maybe.

Just to be clear. Is it supposed to be the serious kind of writing or like if the girl (Jamie) is writing it on her diary?

1)I don't care about my grammar as long as you can read it its fine with me.

2)Yes,shes writing in her diary telling us her experiences,

You should work on your grammar though, since I'm a grammar freak and its quite annoying when I read bad grammar.

I know,but not everyone will have great grammar and you're gonna have to learn to coope with it because (my opinion) it annoys me when people say ''hey fix your grammar''! like really..I can learn on my own

But thanks Anyway?
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PostSubject: Re: Story made by Noah~Odd Adventure   Tue Jan 08, 2013 5:38 pm

Noah wrote:
Lin wrote:
Noah wrote:
Lin wrote:
Its good but you need to improve the grammar and a little of past, present and future tense maybe.

Just to be clear. Is it supposed to be the serious kind of writing or like if the girl (Jamie) is writing it on her diary?

1)I don't care about my grammar as long as you can read it its fine with me.

2)Yes,shes writing in her diary telling us her experiences,

You should work on your grammar though, since I'm a grammar freak and its quite annoying when I read bad grammar.

I know,but not everyone will have great grammar and you're gonna have to learn to coope with it because (my opinion) it annoys me when people say ''hey fix your grammar''! like really..I can learn on my own

But thanks Anyway?

I'm saying it nicely, and I'm just telling you this to help you. The story is a little confusing though.
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PostSubject: Re: Story made by Noah~Odd Adventure   Tue Jan 08, 2013 5:38 pm

Lin wrote:

1)I don't care about my grammar as long as you can read it its fine with me.



Grammar, syntax, and punctuation are very important in writing though. Trust me once you get the basics down you'll already see a major difference in the sophistication of your writing.

But nice story! I find it very entertaining to read :3
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PostSubject: Re: Story made by Noah~Odd Adventure   Tue Jan 08, 2013 8:29 pm

Relora wrote:
Lin wrote:

1)I don't care about my grammar as long as you can read it its fine with me.



Grammar, syntax, and punctuation are very important in writing though. Trust me once you get the basics down you'll already see a major difference in the sophistication of your writing.

But nice story! I find it very entertaining to read :3

At least someone finds it interesting! I know my grammar,sucks since I am not from America.I am from the UK.
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