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PostSubject: Quick story   Thu Jan 24, 2013 6:01 pm

*Homework*

The zoo was always one of my favorite places to visit. There were many interesting animals to look at, including the hippopotamus. There were actually two hippos in the zoo, one big one and the other smaller. The big one was usually energetic. That hippo is probably bored out of its mind being stuck in that zoo.

One day the zoo hired a keeper-in-training. The keeper-in-training was still new so he often forgot things probably because the zoo is so distracting with all the amazing animals and the usual commotion. So of course when the keeper was in charge of feeding the hippos he left the entrance door open.

As I said, the big hippo is usually energetic and he is also eager to explore new things. He saw the door open and walked right out, much to the surprise of many zoo visitors. The zoo keepers eventually set up a hippo trap, but by that time the hippo was already out the door (hippos are surprisingly fast).

There's a grocery store right next to the zoo. The hippo sniffed all the food and walked straight in. He saw the vegetable section and dug in because of course hippos love lettuce and greens.

By that time somebody called animal control and being professionals, they quickly got to the store and trapped the hippo. Then they took it back to its pond in the zoo. Shame, because I kind of hoped it would venture somewhere else. That would've been fun to see!
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PostSubject: Re: Quick story   Thu Jan 24, 2013 6:05 pm

Unless the name of the zoo is named "Zoo", you may want to name the zoo. Cx
Either way, I like this. At first I was thinking, "Is this based on a true story? o-o", but I'm not sure. ;o
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PostSubject: Re: Quick story   Thu Jan 24, 2013 6:06 pm

Haha! It's very nice!
Pros: The story was short and sweet. You didn't over user too many words are your grammar is all correct.
Cons: Well, you should expand on your vocabulary and elaborate using literary devices.
I give an 8/10 o3o
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PostSubject: Re: Quick story   Thu Jan 24, 2013 6:07 pm

Abstract wrote:
Unless the name of the zoo is named "Zoo", you may want to name the zoo. Cx
Either way, I like this. At first I was thinking, "Is this based on a true story? o-o", but I'm not sure. ;o

I was thinking about naming the zoo but meh.

It's not. We had to pick a topic to write about and "animals escaping from the zoo" was the best one.
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PostSubject: Re: Quick story   Fri Jan 25, 2013 7:14 am

Do you have any idea how freaking scary hippos are? They're the second most dangerous animal in the world, after humans. they run at 20 miles an hour, they're very aggressive and can literally bite you in half. They cause more human deaths in Africa than any other large animal. Also, they're actually not herbivores. They're scavengers, and have been seen eating other animals (including other hippos, which makes them cannibals.)
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PostSubject: Re: Quick story   Fri Jan 25, 2013 4:01 pm

Ron Weasley wrote:
Do you have any idea how freaking scary hippos are? They're the second most dangerous animal in the world, after humans. they run at 20 miles an hour, they're very aggressive and can literally bite you in half. They cause more human deaths in Africa than any other large animal. Also, they're actually not herbivores. They're scavengers, and have been seen eating other animals (including other hippos, which makes them cannibals.)

Yeah, I know. Crocs are scared of hippos. Hippos could barge in and take the croc's meat.
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PostSubject: Re: Quick story   Fri Jan 25, 2013 4:05 pm

Rufistar wrote:
Ron Weasley wrote:
Do you have any idea how freaking scary hippos are? They're the second most dangerous animal in the world, after humans. they run at 20 miles an hour, they're very aggressive and can literally bite you in half. They cause more human deaths in Africa than any other large animal. Also, they're actually not herbivores. They're scavengers, and have been seen eating other animals (including other hippos, which makes them cannibals.)

Yeah, I know. Crocs are scared of hippos. Hippos could barge in and take the croc's meat.

Hippos are pretty notorious for killing crocodiles, actually.
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PostSubject: Re: Quick story   Fri Jan 25, 2013 4:06 pm

Ron Weasley wrote:
Rufistar wrote:
Ron Weasley wrote:
Do you have any idea how freaking scary hippos are? They're the second most dangerous animal in the world, after humans. they run at 20 miles an hour, they're very aggressive and can literally bite you in half. They cause more human deaths in Africa than any other large animal. Also, they're actually not herbivores. They're scavengers, and have been seen eating other animals (including other hippos, which makes them cannibals.)

Yeah, I know. Crocs are scared of hippos. Hippos could barge in and take the croc's meat.

Hippos are pretty notorious for killing crocodiles, actually.

*shrugs* I guess they could.
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PostSubject: Re: Quick story   Fri Jan 25, 2013 11:30 pm

OHMY! Its a good story. xD.

Then the Hippo saw a rat and ran way to its cage again. :LOL:
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PostSubject: Re: Quick story   Fri Jan 25, 2013 11:48 pm

Miku wrote:
OHMY! Its a good story. xD.

Then the Hippo saw a rat and ran way to its cage again. :LOL:

That's elephants...

but Thanks!
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PostSubject: Re: Quick story   Sat Jan 26, 2013 12:03 am

Rufistar wrote:
Miku wrote:
OHMY! Its a good story. xD.

Then the Hippo saw a rat and ran way to its cage again. :LOL:

That's elephants...

but Thanks!

I was just getting with it. xD
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