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PostSubject: untitled story   Tue Mar 12, 2013 1:32 am

so yeah i just started this story! it doesn't have a title yet, but here's the first chapter if you want to read it!

Chapter 1:
 

tell me what you guys think of it so far! thanks <3
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PostSubject: Re: untitled story   Tue Mar 12, 2013 11:07 am

I really like this. I only have one small critique that is optional:

Maybe you can try to write in present tense?

Anyways, its really good! 9/10
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PostSubject: Re: untitled story   Tue Mar 12, 2013 1:48 pm

Soul Gem wrote:
I really like this. I only have one small critique that is optional:

Maybe you can try to write in present tense?

Anyways, its really good! 9/10
thank you! but present tense isn't exactly a critique, as a lot of authors have written in past tense (even though present tense is a bit more popular now), but i can see how it's your preference and i understand! i just prefer to write in past tense because i find it less awkward for me. however, i'll try to write some other stories in present tense!
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PostSubject: Re: untitled story   Tue Mar 12, 2013 2:02 pm

blu wrote:
Soul Gem wrote:
I really like this. I only have one small critique that is optional:

Maybe you can try to write in present tense?

Anyways, its really good! 9/10
thank you! but present tense isn't exactly a critique, as a lot of authors have written in past tense (even though present tense is a bit more popular now), but i can see how it's your preference and i understand! i just prefer to write in past tense because i find it less awkward for me. however, i'll try to write some other stories in present tense!

Oh, I know how you feel! I usually write in past tense ALL the time. I like it better, I don't know why though Smile
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