evan Hero Fantagian
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| Subject: Madoka's Literature Thread (WUT) Wed Mar 13, 2013 3:39 pm | |
| Someone sticky this. It's a thread! So yeah I think Imma writer! Maybe....BOOOOOO •••••••• - Timeline Eight:
"Madoka, you have to believe me!" A sniffling Homura was on her knees. I gave a weak smile. "I'm going through with this! Since you told me what's gonna happen, I'll know what to do. Trust me." I go up the elevator of the school. Kyubey is awaiting me on the roof. "So, you've finally come!" Kyubey sounded delighted for an emotionless alien. "What is the wish you desire?" I have a nice wish. I thought it up myself. "I wish to be able to understand things better, with crystal clarity!" My soul felt like it was being pulled out of my body. Ha, it was. "Now, go use your magic!" Kyubey hollered.
Homura and I have now been fighting witches for a week. During the week, we found a cute little girl named Charlotte, who is also a Magical Girl! We've been fighting witches together for a couple of days now. And I myself am having a blast! With my cute frilly dress and a bow and arrow. Homura's yandere dress, and she's all bombs and grenades! And of course, Charlotte, in her scarf, cape, and candy! I believe her weapon is a licorice whip?
Today is the day. The big night. Walpurgis Night. I honestly don't know what I feel...I'm excited....but fearful that something will happen to us. Tine passes, and there are gusts of wind blowing everywhere. Suddenly, a giant witch cane straight out of the ground, laughing! Homura had Charlotte and I grab her timewheel so we could attack. Homura set the bombs, I shot a couple of arrows, and Charlotte ate some cheese she found in her pocket. In the end, we finally beat her! Homura didn't need to be cold and mysterious to save me, because she just did. Maybe this is just like every other timeline. No. Because this time, I had hope and faith in my heart.
- The Encountering of Charlotte Stratstone:
Homura and I were fighting with a witch, and we were having a bit of trouble. The witch had many minions, and they were very strong. A pinkish figure cane in and took over, single-handedly flipping the witch onto its side with her lasso. "Aha!" Charlotte squealed as the barrier collapsed. "You want it?" Charlotte asked us. I replied, "You need it more." Charlotte smiled. "I'm Charlotte Stratstone, a Magical Girl just like you!" Homura was puzzled. "Do you happen to be American?" "Yes, technically. I was born in America, but I'm still Japanese. We moved here when I was five, and we've been here ever since!" Wow, that was extremely accurate. I smiled. "How would you like to form a little group with us, Charlotte?" I offered. I saw her cute, childish smile as she nodded.
- Puella Magi of America:
There are such things in America known as Magical Girls. It is real. The New World also affected America in some ways. But now you ask, if there are no more witches, what happens to the Soul Gems? In America, the souls stay inside of their body, but the gem controls the soul. Let's say your Soul Gem breaks. Since your soul is inside of your body, you're basically just dead. And if your soul remains intact, you could be immortal. In America, you grow until you're 21 if you are a Magical Girl. That's just how it is these days. The new Magical Girls of America are here. Known in America as Eva (pronounced AY-VUH, not EE-VUH), Kayla, Kira, and Sophia, and known in Japan, and by other Puella Magi, as Emaka, Kayami, Kiyara, and Samiko.
- Chains (told in the first-person of Emaka:
I was thrown on the concrete floor by the gang leader. "Stop! Stop it NOW!" A couple of the boys chained me to the flagpole of my school. I cursed under by breath. "B*st*rds..." I sighed. It was getting hard to breathe. "WHAT did you just say about us?!?!" The boy came over and kneed me in a part you don't wanna know about. It was so painful. They left me there, in chains. For a couple of hours, on that weekend, I was chained to that flagpole. "So...I know what you want." A small, white creature that looked sorta like a cat appeared. It had red and blue at the tips of its ears, and it looked like dip dye. "Would you want me to grant that wish for you?" It was so cute, so I nodded, and started to speak, "I wish that I can be well-liked, and that people will accept me for who I am." The creature continued, and a red gem was born. "Be careful with this. This gem is controlling your soul, if it breaks, your soul breaks. Now go, and use your new powers!"
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SilverBell Veteran Fantagian
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| Subject: Re: Madoka's Literature Thread (WUT) Fri Mar 15, 2013 5:56 pm | |
| That's really cute! May I request a story about how Madoka and Homura found Charlotte? | |
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evan Hero Fantagian
Posts : 5295 Join date : 2012-11-03 Age : 21 Location : upstate baby
| Subject: Re: Madoka's Literature Thread (WUT) Sat Mar 16, 2013 12:00 am | |
| Okay!!!
I'm not done with Timeline Eight, but I am writing another chapter!
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flower Hero Fantagian
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| Subject: Re: Madoka's Literature Thread (WUT) Sat Mar 16, 2013 12:09 am | |
| I really like your writing. I suggest that you work more on writing; you should take more time to add details so that you really set a mood. EXAMPLE:
1: I watch as the sun sets behind the ocean. 2: I watch as the glowing sun sets behind the vast, beautiful ocean.
The mood trying to be set is beauty; or peacefulness. | |
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evan Hero Fantagian
Posts : 5295 Join date : 2012-11-03 Age : 21 Location : upstate baby
| Subject: Re: Madoka's Literature Thread (WUT) Sat Mar 16, 2013 8:51 pm | |
| Updated the stories, just in case you haven't already seen!!
I added how they met Charlotte, and the last section of PMMM 8th Timeline! | |
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Reese Hero Fantagian
Posts : 6320 Join date : 2012-11-12 Age : 24
| Subject: Re: Madoka's Literature Thread (WUT) Sat Mar 16, 2013 8:52 pm | |
| These are very good! I'm feeling lazy so I'll add critiques later. | |
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evan Hero Fantagian
Posts : 5295 Join date : 2012-11-03 Age : 21 Location : upstate baby
| Subject: Re: Madoka's Literature Thread (WUT) Sun Apr 21, 2013 10:44 am | |
| Updated with two new stories! One is a theory stry, and one is about my OC contracting. | |
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