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dewey
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PostSubject: Snippet of a Song I'm Writing with AUDIO   Wed Dec 25, 2013 11:32 am

"Superman"
I am falling [x8] -spoken-
Please catch me
I need help,
My fragile heart and fragile mind
Just can't keep up
I need someone
To save me now
So please, please, please, please
Be my superman
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Audio@ http://vocaroo.com/i/s06qvNoTIWr9
This is a very emotional WIP about a girl //me// who feels like she is falling apart and needs someone to be there for her.
I know it doesn't rhyme very well now, but frankly I'm not very worried about that.
comment or whatever.
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PostSubject: Re: Snippet of a Song I'm Writing with AUDIO   Wed Dec 25, 2013 12:02 pm

great idea but you might wanna shorten the I am falling part to around 4-5.
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PostSubject: Re: Snippet of a Song I'm Writing with AUDIO   Wed Dec 25, 2013 1:15 pm

good job bb


this is flower btw
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PostSubject: Re: Snippet of a Song I'm Writing with AUDIO   Tue Dec 31, 2013 9:19 am

Good idea for a club pop song ^^
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emiko
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PostSubject: Re: Snippet of a Song I'm Writing with AUDIO   Tue Dec 31, 2013 3:43 pm

>.< You sing well

Liek Colorora said, shorten the im falling to probably 3-6 times.
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