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juliajuljulia
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PostSubject: THE STORY OF LUCKY BOB PLZ READ   Sun Aug 22, 2010 6:25 pm

Here's my story of lucky bob tell me wat u think and plz rate i submitted it to the writers den and hope it wins lol
so read the spoilers
The Story of Lucky Bob
By Juliajuljulia

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EDIT: im changin the story to make it more interesting!
ps the chhange is in the spoiler
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PLEASE RATE MY STORY.. BOTH... AND I APPRECIATE CRITICISM


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PostSubject: Re: THE STORY OF LUCKY BOB PLZ READ   Sun Aug 22, 2010 6:45 pm

ehh 6 / 10 and lots of errors and stuff but good for your first time
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PostSubject: Re: THE STORY OF LUCKY BOB PLZ READ   Sun Aug 22, 2010 6:46 pm

thnx a lot coolkat
sarcastic
but thnx for commmentin i guess
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PostSubject: Re: THE STORY OF LUCKY BOB PLZ READ   Sun Aug 22, 2010 7:44 pm

8/10. Kinda bland, but I like the story. It's sort of easy to guess what happens, but it's still good Smile
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PostSubject: Re: THE STORY OF LUCKY BOB PLZ READ   Sun Aug 22, 2010 7:46 pm

thnx ric i appreciate it do u think i have a chance of gettin it mentioned?
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PostSubject: Re: THE STORY OF LUCKY BOB PLZ READ   Sun Aug 22, 2010 7:46 pm

Wow great story! Smile
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PostSubject: Re: THE STORY OF LUCKY BOB PLZ READ   Sun Aug 22, 2010 7:47 pm

thnx so much do u think i have a chance of winnin?
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PostSubject: Re: THE STORY OF LUCKY BOB PLZ READ   Sun Aug 22, 2010 10:02 pm

I agree with ric, its a bit bland and not much plot..

I'd rate a 7/10 (im being honest, 'kay?)
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PostSubject: Re: THE STORY OF LUCKY BOB PLZ READ   Sun Aug 22, 2010 10:09 pm

i was lookin at the entries that won and they just made fantage look good so i just did that and maybe ill write another
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PostSubject: Re: THE STORY OF LUCKY BOB PLZ READ   Mon Aug 23, 2010 5:46 am

its all like happy happy and not really a plot so i would say make a plot where umm bob gets robbed? something like that XD but better

8/10 overall and for trying Wink
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PostSubject: Re: THE STORY OF LUCKY BOB PLZ READ   Mon Aug 23, 2010 6:23 am

fine maybe ill ad part where he gets robbed
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PostSubject: Re: THE STORY OF LUCKY BOB PLZ READ   Mon Sep 13, 2010 4:57 pm

I would say 8/10 for the second one, I didnt read the first one.
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