Cool, I was never into fantage videos. And you used way too many effects on the text, I'll just be honest. I could barely read anything you put on there. I also feel like you overlapped the music on one part towards the end, and it sounded... a little odd. But if that was just how the music itself is, the ignore that part. And honestly it just seems like a typical fantage story. Some one wants to destroy fantage, thats the plot line for 99% of fantage stories, but just make sure you make it creative and add your style into it. You do a great job on other things, so I'm sure you'll do amazingly on this.