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+14pokeranger The Criticizer v snake Candy456 CakeBossLover Peter Trash Chells McKenna pinkys ashley123 Lyli Sharpsul999 18 posters |
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Lorena Devoted Fantagian
Posts : 594 Join date : 2010-01-28 Location : Up your nose
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Fri Mar 19, 2010 5:59 pm | |
| Awesome story!!! x3 Love it. | |
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Sharpsul999 Banned Member
Posts : 1457 Join date : 2010-01-26 Location : Sharpsul Land!
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 9:51 am | |
| Chapter 11 will be out near 1 or 2:00 PM EST! | |
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Lorena Devoted Fantagian
Posts : 594 Join date : 2010-01-28 Location : Up your nose
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 9:59 am | |
| Cool, I love this story I don't usually read xD | |
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Lyli Dedicated Fantagian
Posts : 1149 Join date : 2010-01-30 Location : Peegale 5ever (that mean more than 4eva)
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 3:46 pm | |
| Cool story (; Keep up the good work | |
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pokeranger Hero Fantagian
Posts : 5454 Join date : 2010-01-29 Age : 24 Location : Loading...
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 3:47 pm | |
| Its a good story! THis story is really great! | |
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Sharpsul999 Banned Member
Posts : 1457 Join date : 2010-01-26 Location : Sharpsul Land!
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 3:52 pm | |
| Just to get your excitement up, I am writing a short sneakpeak of Chapter 1's next story, Sharp the Fantagian #2 ! | |
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pokeranger Hero Fantagian
Posts : 5454 Join date : 2010-01-29 Age : 24 Location : Loading...
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 3:52 pm | |
| There's going to be a #2 Sharp? Can't wait! | |
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v Moderator
Posts : 9590 Join date : 2010-02-07 Age : 24
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 3:53 pm | |
| YESH!!!! #2 is coming out! I'm soo excited about it coming out which is a miracle! XD | |
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pokeranger Hero Fantagian
Posts : 5454 Join date : 2010-01-29 Age : 24 Location : Loading...
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 4:04 pm | |
| I can't believe we kids have a creative imaginations! I wonder if these stories are better than any writers! This story is so addicting! | |
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Sharpsul999 Banned Member
Posts : 1457 Join date : 2010-01-26 Location : Sharpsul Land!
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 4:15 pm | |
| - pokeranger wrote:
- I can't believe we kids have a creative imaginations! I wonder if these stories are better than any writers! This story is so addicting!
Thank You!! | |
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pokeranger Hero Fantagian
Posts : 5454 Join date : 2010-01-29 Age : 24 Location : Loading...
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 4:45 pm | |
| - Sharpsul99 wrote:
- pokeranger wrote:
- I can't believe we kids have a creative imaginations! I wonder if these stories are better than any writers! This story is so addicting!
Thank You!! Your welcome! As if I don't like fascinating stories like this! | |
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Sharpsul999 Banned Member
Posts : 1457 Join date : 2010-01-26 Location : Sharpsul Land!
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 4:50 pm | |
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McKenna Former Staff
Posts : 3165 Join date : 2010-01-27
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 4:53 pm | |
| Chapter 11 is good! Spooky! Can't wait for more! | |
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pinkys Loyal Fantagian
Posts : 1834 Join date : 2010-01-26
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 4:56 pm | |
| awesome and suspenseful!! i can't wait for more! | |
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Sharpsul999 Banned Member
Posts : 1457 Join date : 2010-01-26 Location : Sharpsul Land!
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 4:58 pm | |
| Chapter 12~ Pain In The Dark is a special chapter! It will be released today! Same for Chapter 13!
Tomorrow:
Chapter 13: Twilight
Chapter 14: Chuko the Great Sage
Last edited by Sharpsul99 on Sun Mar 21, 2010 11:25 am; edited 1 time in total | |
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pinkys Loyal Fantagian
Posts : 1834 Join date : 2010-01-26
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 4:59 pm | |
| ahhh omg i cant wait! sharp ur an AMAZING writer! | |
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Sharpsul999 Banned Member
Posts : 1457 Join date : 2010-01-26 Location : Sharpsul Land!
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 5:00 pm | |
| - pinkys wrote:
- ahhh omg i cant wait! sharp ur an AMAZING writer!
Why thank you. I use to write stories in RL. | |
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Skai Senior Fantagian
Posts : 275 Join date : 2010-01-27 Age : 26
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 5:09 pm | |
| It was pretty well written! The only thing is that in some parts you have wayyy to many people saying the pretty much same exact thing. If you want to put them in your story space them out AND use them more than once. Overall, i thought it was great! | |
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Sharpsul999 Banned Member
Posts : 1457 Join date : 2010-01-26 Location : Sharpsul Land!
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 5:17 pm | |
| Thanks Blue. Where is it repeating the same exact stuff, by the way. | |
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Skai Senior Fantagian
Posts : 275 Join date : 2010-01-27 Age : 26
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 5:20 pm | |
| This part...
"Holy smokes!" Canada said, running for his life.
"Look out!" Sameer said.
"A tornado!" Andrew shouted.
Was just kinda random you didnt introduce the characters, if you want to use someone you havent talked about yet you need to intoduce them in or say something like a random person i saw when ____ was happening. Not trying to be bossy just trying to help you make it better becuase yes you are younger than me... | |
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pokeranger Hero Fantagian
Posts : 5454 Join date : 2010-01-29 Age : 24 Location : Loading...
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 5:20 pm | |
| You kept on repeating stuff? I didn't notice. o.o | |
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Sharpsul999 Banned Member
Posts : 1457 Join date : 2010-01-26 Location : Sharpsul Land!
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 5:23 pm | |
| - Bluemango64 wrote:
- This part...
"Holy smokes!" Canada said, running for his life.
"Look out!" Sameer said.
"A tornado!" Andrew shouted.
Was just kinda random you didnt introduce the characters, if you want to use someone you havent talked about yet you need to intoduce them in or say something like a random person i saw when ____ was happening. Not trying to be bossy just trying to help you make it better becuase yes you are younger than me... Thanks for the tip. Here is Chapter 12's banner. | |
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v Moderator
Posts : 9590 Join date : 2010-02-07 Age : 24
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 5:35 pm | |
| I love chapter 11! Why, I kept reading it and my little brother is mad at me because he wants to go on XD | |
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Sharpsul999 Banned Member
Posts : 1457 Join date : 2010-01-26 Location : Sharpsul Land!
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 5:58 pm | |
| Chapter 12 is out! Please enjoy this special chapter! | |
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v Moderator
Posts : 9590 Join date : 2010-02-07 Age : 24
| Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Mar 20, 2010 6:03 pm | |
| Ooh, I also love chapter 12! Who am i kidding? I love all of them! xD I wonder what happens next... Can't wait for more! | |
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