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Burittanie
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PostSubject: Aoi Shika   Aoi Shika Icon_minitimeSat Dec 18, 2010 2:58 am

IMAGE IS VERY BIG:
Spoiler:
Been a while since I posted a drawing huh?
So this is Aoi Shika, a new OC of mine.
Her name means "Blue Deer".
Yeah that's a rock on her foot It looks like poop though. LOL
GAHHH STUPID SCANNER
I love critiques. Just sayin' :3

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PostSubject: Re: Aoi Shika   Aoi Shika Icon_minitimeSat Dec 18, 2010 9:55 am

AASFSLFKAJ You should have posted the one you showed me in the chatbox yesterday. That one was ~utter perfection~. This one is worse, let me do a pros and cons.

THE CONS:
-You seem to have slipped back into making the neck too long and too skinny, remember how long it took you to get rid of that?
-Notice how it seems it has two shoulders? Or an extra joint in the upper arm? You should draw the weird line at the top of the ribcage first, drag it all the way to the shoulder, then do the arm from there.
-The anatomy is general is a little weird, especially the too long and too slender body.

THE PROS:
-Wonderfully creative work, this is a very original spin to a dated OC type.
-The hair is just win. You pay attention to the individual strands, and you add shine.
-This is a really weird thing to say, but my absolute favorite part of the drawing was the folds in the clothing with the knee. You know how one leg is a bit higher than the other and the dress folds there? I loved that. I really, really, did.
-That's just without menioning the blade or the facial anatomy. The face shape could be better (though not so much better as to garner itself its own CON), but the eyes and the mouth and the lade more than make up for it.
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PostSubject: Re: Aoi Shika   Aoi Shika Icon_minitimeSat Dec 18, 2010 10:37 am

THAT IS AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Shocked
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lole1239
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PostSubject: Re: Aoi Shika   Aoi Shika Icon_minitimeSat Dec 18, 2010 10:38 am

THAT IS AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Shocked
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PostSubject: Re: Aoi Shika   Aoi Shika Icon_minitimeSat Dec 18, 2010 12:00 pm

Amazing!
I absolutely love it.
Especially the hair. C:

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Burittanie
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PostSubject: Re: Aoi Shika   Aoi Shika Icon_minitimeSat Dec 18, 2010 5:54 pm

Makkine wrote:
AASFSLFKAJ You should have posted the one you showed me in the chatbox yesterday. That one was ~utter perfection~. This one is worse, let me do a pros and cons.

THE CONS:
-You seem to have slipped back into making the neck too long and too skinny, remember how long it took you to get rid of that?
-Notice how it seems it has two shoulders? Or an extra joint in the upper arm? You should draw the weird line at the top of the ribcage first, drag it all the way to the shoulder, then do the arm from there.
-The anatomy is general is a little weird, especially the too long and too slender body.

THE PROS:
-Wonderfully creative work, this is a very original spin to a dated OC type.
-The hair is just win. You pay attention to the individual strands, and you add shine.
-This is a really weird thing to say, but my absolute favorite part of the drawing was the folds in the clothing with the knee. You know how one leg is a bit higher than the other and the dress folds there? I loved that. I really, really, did.
-That's just without menioning the blade or the facial anatomy. The face shape could be better (though not so much better as to garner itself its own CON), but the eyes and the mouth and the lade more than make up for it.

I would have posted the other drawing, but for some reason the picture wouldn't upload :[
And this is just what I needed, pro's and cons.
I do agree with everything you said, I have a habit of making my people have such a long body. And the neck does look funky. Everything looks funky xD.
Thanks for the critique <3.
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