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Makkine
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PostSubject: Storm poetry   Wed Jun 22, 2011 1:46 pm

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1) Do you feel like this piece has a rhythm? If not, what would you change to make it feel more natural?
2) Favourite lines? Least favourite?
3) Was the theme obvious enough, or do you feel as though I could accent it more?
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PostSubject: Re: Storm poetry   Wed Jun 22, 2011 5:57 pm

1. I feel like it has a rhythm. I don't know - I'm not an expert, but it sounds really good.
2. My favourite parts were the first stanza and the fifth stanza. I really liked the "bipolar wind" line. I didn't feel like the second stanza was overly interesting, but it was still good.
3. The theme was clear.
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PostSubject: Re: Storm poetry   Wed Jun 22, 2011 6:22 pm

[quote="Makkine
1) Do you feel like this piece has a rhythm? If not, what would you change to make it feel more natural?

A great rhythm, dear.

2) Favourite lines? Least favourite?

They're all great >w<

3) Was the theme obvious enough, or do you feel as though I could accent it more?

A little more accented would be nice ;)

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Overall very nice. ^^

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PostSubject: Re: Storm poetry   Thu Jun 23, 2011 4:58 am

1) Do you feel like this piece has a rhythm? If not, what would you change to make it feel more natural?it does have rhythm in it

2) Favourite lines? Least favourite? all of them are good but my favourite one was the first verse

3) Was the theme obvious enough, or do you feel as though I could accent it more? The theme was really clear
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