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PostSubject: Story   Mon Mar 15, 2010 1:20 pm

I'm currently going to make a story. I don't really know a good title for it yet, but its a pretty nice story and I hope you all enjoy.

CHAPTER 1

''Wake up, Sky! Its 3 'o clock in the afternoon! WAKE UP!!'', shouted mom.
*Sigh*, I thought I would break my record for sleeping today. ''Oh well.'', I looked down to myself... I looked over to my windows and suddenly I thought to myself... ''Why am I named Sky? I mean, its not like i'm pale with sky-blue hair...'', I kept on making suggestions when finally I just gave up on it.
-''Food is ready, hun!'', called mom.
''I'll be there in a minute, mom!!'', I replied.
I went downstairs with my ragged pyjamas and toe-socks, I had my hair all messed up, too.
I got there , all ready to eat my so-called 'Breakfast-lunch-food'. My mom had cooked mashed potatoes and steak. ''Mmm...'', I thought, as the smell conquered me. I sat down and started gulping my food. When I finished, I washed my plate and went back upstairs.

End of Chapter 1~

Chapter 2

[left]When I got up to my room, I heared my cel beeping, so I picked it up and checked to see if I had any messages. I had gotten a text from my wonderful boyfriend, Steven. The text mentioned:
[To be continued]


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PostSubject: Re: Story   Mon Mar 15, 2010 1:22 pm

Cool, and good story Very Happy


Can't wait for more Razz
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PostSubject: Re: Story   Mon Mar 15, 2010 1:24 pm

Thanks!
I'm finishing chapter 2, so lets see how the feedback goes and Ill post it later!
Also, if you guys would like, Id love to hear your honest opinion about it, you can also rate and give me ideas for the story!
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PostSubject: Re: Story   Mon Mar 15, 2010 1:42 pm

My honest opinion is that its great. More detail though XD


Can't wait for Ch.2!
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PostSubject: Re: Story   Mon Mar 15, 2010 1:45 pm

Lol yeah, But theres a paragraph in Chapter two thats really long and it talks about one thing Mad
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PostSubject: Re: Story   Mon Mar 15, 2010 2:35 pm

Well, its not so good. Its really short, and it doesn't really give a page-turner feeling. Its, well, an OK story.
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PostSubject: Re: Story   Mon Mar 15, 2010 2:51 pm

sharpsul99 wrote:
Well, its not so good. Its really short, and it doesn't really give a page-turner feeling. Its, well, an OK story.

Yeah, I know.
I really appreciate your opinion.
May I atleast rest my case?
1. Yes, I agree with you. Its too short! But trust me, the next chapters will be longer. That was just introducing the day.
2. Agreed. I know you can't really understand the purpose but you'll see in the new chapters ill be adding soon.
3. Yay ok story. lol <3
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PostSubject: Re: Story   Mon Mar 15, 2010 2:57 pm

It's a really nice intro.
10/10
can't wait for more!
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