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 Some of my stories, a few poems, and a drawing.

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PostSubject: Some of my stories, a few poems, and a drawing.    Some of my stories, a few poems, and a drawing.  Icon_minitimeSun Oct 02, 2011 12:10 pm

Heya! Would you all like to see the artwork of the other, less artsy mod? Of course you would. People on my deviantART or on the other forum I frequent have definitely seen these. Critique is very welcome, praise/compliments as well, general commentary also. Please do not just rate and leave, though.

(SHORT) STORIES

Winter:

Peeling off the blisters on your feet after running:

Extract from a chapter from a novel I'm kinda half-working on?:

POEMS

Random:

Short poem one:

Written at night (not too sure whether I should include enjambment in the second stanza):

Short poem two:

ART

Coloured OC:
Pencil-shaded OC, kinda slanted >_>:
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I likez all of em!!
But who is the girl in the art section??
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kateyperry221 wrote:
I likez all of em!!
But who is the girl in the art section??
She's an original character from a political fiction story I like making up in my spare time.
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Oh,That's so awesome!!
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I enjoyed them all very much.
Seeing as I'm always humbled by your critiques, I find my self not fit for critiquing your own stories. Same goes for pictures and poems, But I must say they all are quite well done and show that effort and time was put into all of them for sure.
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i skimmed thought but they sound great. *Clap Clap* you never know a person's true potential until you see for yourself
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@Relora: Don't be afraid to critique, humble me instead. Thank you!

@Skye: Thank'ee, and I appreciate the small-texted message as well. :DD
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i like the picture thats colored in the best out of all the other things you did.
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PostSubject: Re: Some of my stories, a few poems, and a drawing.    Some of my stories, a few poems, and a drawing.  Icon_minitimeSun Oct 02, 2011 2:32 pm

I LOVE THESE MAKKINE.
THATS ALL THAT NEEDS TO BE SAID.
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PostSubject: Re: Some of my stories, a few poems, and a drawing.    Some of my stories, a few poems, and a drawing.  Icon_minitimeSun Oct 02, 2011 2:47 pm

BEAUTIFUL.
Although, some of your stories have minor grammar problems.
Ex: I am not thinking right now, however. I am waiting.
Your however is placed awkwardly. Use it like:
However, I am not think right now; I am waiting.
Or
I am not thinking right now; I am waiting.

Just a little tip on that.
I advise to read things out loud. You can catch mistakes easier by doing that.
And your art is nice. I like the sketch better than the colored, but I think it's because I like sketchy art style.
Overall, you did a great job!
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@lucia and roxs: Wow, thanks! :DD

@Crownie: Thank you so, so much. I'm not a native English speaker, so my grammar can be off at times. I appreciate your help, and you're right. I always read my poems aloud, but I really need to do that with my prose as well. I love the sketchy art style, glad you liked!
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yea i wonder how you make short stories because everytime i make a story, i just make it longer than i wanted it to be.
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Haha, I have the opposite problem. If I work for too long on something, I won't be able to continue effectively.
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agdjsdf I love all of your work (expescially your drawings<3).
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wow they are really good ;D
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Your drawing is amazing. ;-;
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Wow, Makkine, they're all amazing! I liked the drawings best.
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Yea It's Very Co0ol SmileSmile
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