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PostSubject: Just Above A Whisper   Just Above A Whisper Icon_minitimeTue Nov 15, 2011 10:28 am

It was late one Sunday night
When she went to her mom.
She said she was nervous about starting school;
But secretly that wasn't it at all.

She looked in the mirror
And shook her pretty little head.
The thoughts she was thinking jumbled up
And for a second she felt dead.

She had just moved away;
She was starting eighth grade alone.
She didn't know how to act or what to say,
So she thought of staying home.

Her first-day outfit was too perfect,
Just like everything else.
At her old school she'd been a hit
Yet she only worried about herself.

When she got in bed that night,
She convinced her eyes to close.
She thought about all the friends she (hoped she) would make,
And thought about her ones at home.

The next morning it was clear,
Her nerves were kicking in.
She was a strong girl though;
And didn't let them win.

Walking into school for the first time,
She turned heads with every stride.
Everyone there seemed so cold, though; It was like they were trained that way.
Just when she gave up hope, she found a group that seemed okay.

She ran to their table and began talking;
Surprised at how nice they sounded.
Suddenly they began laughing
And she turned around; dumbfounded.

There ate alone a girl with glasses, frizzy hair and braces.
The girl ignored the laughs, the teasing and the looks on people's faces.
Instead she kept eating, reading and studying
Like nothing was wrong.

"How can that girl do that," She thought;
"Without breaking down in tears?"
What she didn't know was that
This had happened to this girl for years.

Her thoughts were knocked away when she heard;
"It's funny, Ashley. You should do it too."
Because she wanted to be accepted;
She decided that's what she was going to do.

Day after day she felt stronger;
More included, more assured.
Day after day she realized that
Things were getting easier for the girl to ignore.

This was unacceptable, she decided,
So she had to take it farther.
She'd developed a hate for that "ugly" girl
And she needed to mentally scar her.

Slyly after math one day;
She stole the poor girl's binders.
She ripped out all the pages in them and then
Sat it right behind her.

The girl failed almost all of her classes
Because of the lack of her papers.
She didn't know who had done such a thing;
Who could have done this? Who brutally hated her?

On the other hand;
She had gotten a new boyfriend, was popular and was the new queen bee.
Her grades were straight A's
and her friends weren't going to flee.

Each and every day, they tormented the girl
Making sure she would "back off".
Finally one day she and her friends beat up the girl
Leaving her on the ground to continuously cough.

They ended up doing this every day;
Threatening to kill her if she told.
After each time; her health declined.
After each time, her insides felt cold.

One day they did enough to make her go unconscious;
And they ran; but not to get help.
She realized that she could go to jail for doing that;
But she doubted she would because of her stealth.

The girl ended up having to repeat the eighth grade;
From being in the hospital and more.
She lay on her bed and cried all night;
She couldn't go through the same hell as she had before.

The next day she was eating lunch with her friends when she heard the loudspeaker;
"One of our students has killed herself," The principal said;

Just above a whisper.
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PostSubject: Re: Just Above A Whisper   Just Above A Whisper Icon_minitimeTue Nov 15, 2011 10:35 am

Oh my god
I cried
10/10
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PostSubject: Re: Just Above A Whisper   Just Above A Whisper Icon_minitimeTue Nov 15, 2011 10:43 am

Thanks. ^_^

I spent a lot of time on it.
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PostSubject: Re: Just Above A Whisper   Just Above A Whisper Icon_minitimeTue Nov 15, 2011 10:58 am

Bluerivers wrote:
Thanks. ^_^

I spent a lot of time on it.

You're welcome. I really liked it. (:
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PostSubject: Re: Just Above A Whisper   Just Above A Whisper Icon_minitimeTue Nov 15, 2011 9:45 pm

Wow.
Nice job.
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PostSubject: Re: Just Above A Whisper   Just Above A Whisper Icon_minitimeTue Nov 15, 2011 9:50 pm

this is so sad
you're an amazing writer :3
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PostSubject: Re: Just Above A Whisper   Just Above A Whisper Icon_minitimeWed Nov 16, 2011 9:29 am

This is really good.
solid 10/10
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PostSubject: Re: Just Above A Whisper   Just Above A Whisper Icon_minitimeWed Nov 16, 2011 9:43 am

THANK YOU.

Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Just Above A Whisper   Just Above A Whisper Icon_minitimeWed Nov 16, 2011 8:15 pm

SPEECHLESS.
Poor girl :/
10/10!
YOU SHOULD BE AN AUTHOR, JUST SAYING.
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PostSubject: Re: Just Above A Whisper   Just Above A Whisper Icon_minitimeThu Nov 17, 2011 8:32 am

Lol, an author. I've wanted to be that for years ;-;
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PostSubject: Re: Just Above A Whisper   Just Above A Whisper Icon_minitimeThu Nov 17, 2011 4:23 pm

Sad omg! Thats like the best story i ever heard! 10/10
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PostSubject: Re: Just Above A Whisper   Just Above A Whisper Icon_minitimeThu Nov 17, 2011 4:41 pm

Oh my that as a beautiful piece of work I felt like punching all the characters for picking on the one girl. I almost yelped when they announced the girl had committed suicide.
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PostSubject: Re: Just Above A Whisper   Just Above A Whisper Icon_minitimeThu Nov 17, 2011 4:53 pm

That was just.......AMAZING!
Epic, Love it
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PostSubject: Re: Just Above A Whisper   Just Above A Whisper Icon_minitimeThu Nov 17, 2011 5:39 pm

awesome 1010101010101010101011001001/1001010101010101010100101010010101
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PostSubject: Re: Just Above A Whisper   Just Above A Whisper Icon_minitimeThu Nov 17, 2011 5:41 pm

Bluerivers wrote:
Lol, an author. I've wanted to be that for years ;-;

Who hasn't v.v

sadly the dream fades each passing day for me... I wonder if people would like a zombie apocalypse book though hmm......
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