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Mila
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PostSubject: My first shaded girl   My first shaded girl Icon_minitimeTue Nov 22, 2011 4:15 pm

please rate. please please. and judge it and tell me what i need to fix
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PostSubject: Re: My first shaded girl   My first shaded girl Icon_minitimeTue Nov 22, 2011 4:30 pm

Hmmm

~Her left arm is very awkward. The hand is a bit long and just makes it look as if her arm is bending a second time.
~There is no left shoulder
~The right arm (in comparison to the left) is disproportionate. The elbow isn't positioned correctly.
~The skirt wasn't shaded
~The skirt also is very stiff and unnatural
~There are no lips. Just a line around a tongue stuck in the bottom middle of her face
~She doesn't appear to have a bossum.
~Her hair is a tad bit stiff and "big". It raises a good few inches above her head and sticks out a good few inches as well.
~The hair's shading looks a bit awkward but it all seems to be in the right places.
~She has no nose : now she can't smell pretty flowers
~Her head is round and bumpy. Not very life like is it?
~The background hair isn't very similar to other parts.

her eyes are pretty good except they aren't set together. One is lower than the other.

Pretty nice for a first try though ^^
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PostSubject: Re: My first shaded girl   My first shaded girl Icon_minitimeTue Nov 22, 2011 4:46 pm

Okay. Wow. Lots of things to fix here. But I'm only gonna put a few.

~Her right arm is VERY crooked. Were you trying to make it look like her hand is on her hip?
~ Her eyes a uneven

Here is a reference picture:
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PostSubject: Re: My first shaded girl   My first shaded girl Icon_minitimeTue Nov 22, 2011 5:00 pm

yes lot's of mistakes.

Relora already said the thing's that i was going to say.


@Purplebunny the right arm looks weird o_o

I'll give it a. 3/10 for effort
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PostSubject: Re: My first shaded girl   My first shaded girl Icon_minitimeTue Nov 22, 2011 6:18 pm

i was just wondering about the shading lol. i didnt know all of the mistakes Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: My first shaded girl   My first shaded girl Icon_minitimeTue Nov 22, 2011 6:31 pm

Her expression seems way too forced. She has no eyebrows. The style of anime is supposed to have eyebrows even if the character has bangs. Also, they're no need for the two shiny thingies. Just put one. The right part of her waist seems to be going outwards instead of inwards. A lady needs curves. Her wrist is a little too bended. All though, it's not really a big deal. There is barely any shading, other than the hair, but it's shaded wrong. The shine is supposed to be on the left or right side, not everywhere. Her head seems a bit too big for body.
@Purplebunny: Uh, you don't need to say that. The reference isn't even proportioned correctly....
@Anni: Same goes to you. Honestly, if someone said it, you don't have to beat a dead horse.

For your second try, it's very good! I really love it. 6.7/10.
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PostSubject: Re: My first shaded girl   My first shaded girl Icon_minitimeTue Nov 22, 2011 6:39 pm

The shading is good...but her mouth...it scares me ;\
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PostSubject: Re: My first shaded girl   My first shaded girl Icon_minitimeTue Nov 22, 2011 6:48 pm

rin wrote:
The shading is good...but her mouth...it scares me ;\
oh yeah :p does it scare u know lol
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PostSubject: Re: My first shaded girl   My first shaded girl Icon_minitimeTue Nov 22, 2011 6:58 pm

It kinda looks "blobby" next time maybe try adding an outline?
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