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PostSubject: Semi-realism attempt   Mon Nov 21, 2011 8:09 pm

itfailssohardlol



Please rate and critique.

Her eyes really creep me out LOOL


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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Mon Nov 21, 2011 8:10 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Mon Nov 21, 2011 8:12 pm

Even though you ls'd this and I saw..
The lips are weird
She has no collar bone
The hair is HUGE (Unless you were really focusing in the hair and it was practicing that more than the semi-realisim)
I don't know where her arms stop so overall I don't know how wide they are.
Soo; I'd give it a 8.5/10 seeing how tempting semi-realism can get.
EDIT: OHH HER EYEBROWS. She has none //shot
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Mon Nov 21, 2011 8:13 pm

I like the way you had some individual strands fall away from the rest of the hair. It makes it look incredibly realistic!
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Mon Nov 21, 2011 8:18 pm

Y U SO GOOD AT DRAWING
The only thing that bugs me are the eyes though.
But that's my opinion, so yeah.
It's awesome. >w<

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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Mon Nov 21, 2011 8:27 pm

8/10
THE EYES AND LIPS LOOK CREEPY o3o
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Mon Nov 21, 2011 8:48 pm

I give it a 7/10.

The way her shoulder is shaped is unnatural for a semi-realism look, and her hairline is uneven. The lips are.....?????

As for the shading, I think it looks great. What program did you use?
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Mon Nov 21, 2011 8:48 pm

EYEBROWS.
I know it's semi-realism, but you still need to follow realism rules.
That nose.
....It's a bit too high up, as well as the mouth. She should have some sign of eyelids. Her neck is too short, and too skinny. This could be because of the position she's in. (But you didn't give much to go on with that since you didn't give her many details there)
There's also a lack of shading on her face.
Her hair. The position is off so it kind of looks like she's wearing a wig. Try studying hair in real life to get a feel for drawing it.
I like how you added strads of hair, though they're too thick. Pick up a piece of your hair and look at it. Is one strand of hair that thick?
Were you rushing at the end, or something? The highlights on her hair look like you didn't bother to blend them at all.
It's good that you wanted to make the hair move and all, but the way it falls over her shoulder isn't quite right. It's really good, though.
Her hair looks a bit too big for her head too.
Altogether, 8/10. Very good, keep practicing, no one can ever be perfect.
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Mon Nov 21, 2011 9:21 pm

Lemme help you our a bit. You're having her look down, but there is no foreshortening on the facial features. Let me draw you some guidelines, in which there will be a normal 3/4s perspective instead of the funky perspective you tried to pull off.

http://i43.tinypic.com/n2fuh4.png
As you can see, the nose and the lips are much too close, the eyes are to far apart and don't follow a curved line, and the hairline is just wonky.

Now, a few specifics:
The eyes. These are not realistic. I suggest you draw a circle, use a cross to find where the pupils should be centred, then add the eyelids around it. Also, where are the eyebrows? I fixed the eyes further down.

The nose. It's okay, there are a few things weird about it but those will be fixed with time.

The lips. The bottom lip is usually larger than the top one. The ones you drew look ... flat. They look painted on a flat surface, there is no depth to them. I fixed them below.

The collarbones and the shoulders, the entire area where the pectoralis major and the deltoids should be. They don't move like that naturally, unless you're having a muscle spasm. They go downward. The entire shoulder area has a sort of backwards \____/ shape. There is also no insinuation of the collarbone anywhere.

The hair is HUGE and the hairline makes absolutely no sense. I fixed it below.

Here, I rotated most facial features, added eyebrows, fixed the eyelids, fixed the lips, decreased the hair thickness, slightly lowered the shoulders and made the arms less thick. I couldn't fix the hairline, and I had to do it all on MS Paint. I didn't redraw anything, which I recommend you do.
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I give you a 3-5 out of 10, sorry. However, the way I see it, 5 is average quality, so if you get a 5 you're on the right track. I don't give people sevens, eights, or nines liberally. 10 is unthinkable unless I can see literally no flaws.


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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Mon Nov 21, 2011 9:44 pm

it seems like you focused mostly on the hair and didn't stop to notice the details of the person...
shading of the body is needed, of course.
and where are the eyebrows?
the face is uneven in a way.. and the body proportions are sort of strange.
the arm looks like it's sticking out of, or connected to it's torso.
and where's the shirt o;
the nose is shaped awkward...
so i'll give you a 6.9/10
--sorry, i'm just really into realistic, and is sort of picky. lool.
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Mon Nov 21, 2011 9:49 pm

It looks very much like... paint. Especially the hair.

In other words, it looks too much like a drawing, than real life.

Piano wrote:
6.9

Teehee
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Mon Nov 21, 2011 10:20 pm

Thank you all for the critiques c: Honestly when I look at this I laugh now even though I drew this a little while ago xD Her face looks so creepy bro.
@Kandi I used Paint Tool SAI to draw and color this.
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Mon Nov 21, 2011 11:22 pm

Piano wrote:

so i'll give you a 6.9/10
THIS. LOOOL.
Kay there; five words. Over 3. Now 10. xD
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Mon Nov 21, 2011 11:28 pm

LOOL. no offense but i just couldn't make myself put a 7. DD:

so i went to 6.9 :3
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Mon Nov 21, 2011 11:36 pm

Do you know what 69 is? It's alright if not. xD
//Sorryofftopicorz
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Tue Nov 22, 2011 9:13 am

I noticed the hair and head looks really big also. Same problem you had in your other drawing so you might want to try working on that specifically.

Fuko-Chan wrote:
Do you know what 69 is? It's alright if not. xD
//Sorryofftopicorz

You're 10, and you know what it is?

No more conversations with Toast, little lady. No more urban dictionary either.
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Tue Nov 22, 2011 9:39 am

Spy-der wrote:
I noticed the hair and head looks really big also. Same problem you had in your other drawing so you might want to try working on that specifically.

Fuko-Chan wrote:
Do you know what 69 is? It's alright if not. xD
//Sorryofftopicorz

You're 10, and you know what it is?

No more conversations with Toast, little lady. No more urban dictionary either.

I LOL'd...for a very long time x'D

The fact that her lips are huge makes it look kinda like lip implants....her forhead is too small for such big hair.
5.5/10
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Tue Nov 22, 2011 10:38 am

Spy-der wrote:
No more conversations with Toast, little lady.
Thank god I wasn't drinking anything, I would've probably spit it out.
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Tue Nov 22, 2011 10:40 am

Makkine wrote:
Spy-der wrote:
No more conversations with Toast, little lady.
Thank god I wasn't drinking anything, I would've probably spit it out.
replace toast with loke.
also, spy-der, you do realize toast is 9?

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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Tue Nov 22, 2011 11:10 am

Timegear wrote:
Makkine wrote:
Spy-der wrote:
No more conversations with Toast, little lady.
Thank god I wasn't drinking anything, I would've probably spit it out.
replace toast with loke.
also, spy-der, you do realize toast is 9?

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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Tue Nov 22, 2011 1:00 pm

Honestly the sketch looked so much better but I kept getting annoyed by the eyes and I wanted to try something different but it failed.
sketch:
 
Also, she has no shirt cause I'm lazy.
@everyone LOOL
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Tue Nov 22, 2011 1:02 pm

IchigoPanda wrote:
Honestly the sketch looked so much better but I kept getting annoyed by the eyes and I wanted to try something different but it failed.
sketch:
 
Also, she has no shirt cause I'm lazy.
@everyone LOOL
The sketch looks beautiful ;-;
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Tue Nov 22, 2011 1:03 pm

Timegear wrote:
Makkine wrote:
Spy-der wrote:
No more conversations with Toast, little lady.
Thank god I wasn't drinking anything, I would've probably spit it out.
replace toast with loke.
also, spy-der, you do realize toast is 9?

Time, you shouldve seen the conversation between loke, toast, and I last night. Toast went full out perverted. I told her that she needed to bathe in holy water or something.

I dont really think loke would explain in detail, what 69 is, whereas I could see toast doing it, with all the perverted stuff she spouts on a regular basis.

And yes, I do.
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Tue Nov 22, 2011 1:14 pm

Spy-der wrote:
Timegear wrote:
Makkine wrote:
Spy-der wrote:
No more conversations with Toast, little lady.
Thank god I wasn't drinking anything, I would've probably spit it out.
replace toast with loke.
also, spy-der, you do realize toast is 9?

Time, you shouldve seen the conversation between loke, toast, and I last night. Toast went full out perverted. I told her that she needed to bathe in holy water or something.

I dont really think loke would explain in detail, what 69 is, whereas I could see toast doing it, with all the perverted stuff she spouts on a regular basis.

And yes, I do.

LOL'd again
if someone said something preverted and my grandmother was around she'd look like:
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PostSubject: Re: Semi-realism attempt   Tue Nov 22, 2011 1:15 pm

rin wrote:

LOL'd again
if someone said something preverted and my grandmother was around she'd look like:
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OHGODLOL
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