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giffy12
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PostSubject: The Mystery ( May Be Short )   Wed Dec 07, 2011 7:03 pm

So I got back my composition and got an A .
It may not be that good , so you can read it and let me know what you think!

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Hope you liked it!


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PostSubject: Re: The Mystery ( May Be Short )   Thu Dec 08, 2011 2:03 am

Very good. In the future though,try avoiding saying things such as "that was my story!". Instead, give the reader the same message, just with different words. Close the writing, don't tell the reader he/she just read something. They already know that.

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PostSubject: Re: The Mystery ( May Be Short )   Thu Dec 08, 2011 5:08 am

Cute, but it has an abrupt starting and ending. o-o
And do you know the meaning of literally? I can't understand half the story, no offense.
But it's good. 7.8/10.
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PostSubject: Re: The Mystery ( May Be Short )   Thu Dec 08, 2011 6:11 pm

Thx for the feedback!
Oh and I just got another composition today Neutral
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