elise Devoted Fantagian
Posts : 613 Join date : 2011-12-01 Age : 32
| Subject: Miku-lu, Happiest girl in the world. [ Maybe! ] Mon Dec 26, 2011 11:29 pm | |
| Hey, Im making a story. Enjoy! - Chapter 1 :
Hi! I'm Miku-lu but you can call me Miku! Let me tell you about myself, I love animals, fruits and other good things! I am the happiest girl in the world! Or am I not? Nonsense my life is perfect. Today was my first day of school. My phone was ringing, It was Jane, No calls, she must have messaged me. Here's what it said: Go to the park ASAP before school starts at 9:50. I looked at the time, it was 8:00. I had enough time. I met Jane at the park, she was very clever, she could fake injuries and other clever things. She said with a flickery smile, " Miku I'm glad your here!" I asked Jane what was going on and make it snappy. " Well, I met this guy at the school office, I had to give some paper's to the lady. The guy said Hi with a smile. I could tell he was in our class." Wow, she remembers all that... I told you, shes really clever! I asked her what his name was and she shrugged. She told me: " He told me to call him Jeski." Cool name, he must be from Japan like me. I thought. Jane and me went to school and bumped into Jeski and a clever-looking guy. smiled, " Hi Guys!" I AM SO SORRY!! I WAS TOO TIRED TO RIGHT THE REST ;A; Ask me if you want to critque,
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FruitCake Veteran Fantagian
Posts : 4126 Join date : 2011-05-24 Age : 21 Location : ♫
| Subject: Re: Miku-lu, Happiest girl in the world. [ Maybe! ] Tue Dec 27, 2011 9:52 am | |
| the story is good, can i critque it?
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elise Devoted Fantagian
Posts : 613 Join date : 2011-12-01 Age : 32
| Subject: Re: Miku-lu, Happiest girl in the world. [ Maybe! ] Tue Dec 27, 2011 10:06 am | |
| - xxCakexx wrote:
the story is good, can i critque it? Sure, and thank you! OwO | |
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