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| Subject: Secret agents Sun Mar 18, 2012 7:33 am | |
| I'm just writing a first-person narrative story about a girl who's a secret agent. UFDFNDK. I'm feeling idiotic right now that I posted a poll for this. If you like the story, please rate and comment. If you hate it...Don't post at all. - Sneak peek:
"What in the...?" I cried out as the floor beneath me crumbled. I fell into a deep pit. At the same time, the ceiling collapsed as well. "Whoopee." I muttered. I tried scrambling out of the pit. My efforts were fruitless. I keep sliding back down- this floor was slippery MARBLE. I covered my eyes with my hands. This was the end.
- Chapter 1:
"ARCELYN ARCELYN ARCELYN ARCELYN WAKEUP WAKEUP WAKEUP WAKEUP" "Sandra, would you stop jumping on my stomach? What is so important right now?" I groaned, opening my eyes. "YOUR SECRET AGENT WORK!" Sandra yelled in my face. "What!?" I jumped up and checked the clock. 6:30. I was half an hour late. I'm Arcelyn, yeah yeah, you may think it's a funny name. Whatever. I go to the S.S.Y.A- Secret School for Young Agents. I'm just twelve. I zipped up my black, leather uniform and groggily walked down the stairs. This is what happens when I'm not on time. "School bag!" Sandra yelled. "Got all my stuff?" I asked. "I'm sorry if your decipher got all crumply." she said, giggling. With an angry gesture, I put on my rocket boots and started to fly. "What? No fuel? Seriously!" I moaned. I had to walk. *** "Arcelyn Jones." My teacher, Mr.Smiths said, looking down at me. "You're an hour late." "Sorry." I panted, and took a seat to my best friend Amelia. "What's wrong with you? You appear an hour late- Arcelyn, did you dye your hair?" "Jet black." I smiled, tossing it around. "Now let's keep quiet or Mr.Smiths will get angry." "Rocket boots have as much fuel as Jet Packs." Mr.Smiths was saying. "But the fuel will run out if it is not used within three weeks. Jet pack fuel is common- all you need are coal or crushed rocks." he said cheerfully. I put up my hand. "But, Sir," I said, "Coal and crushed rocks aren't fuel." The whole class turned their heads to Mr.Smiths. "Yes, Miss Jones, but we are talking about the energy that counts as fuel, not the real fuel found underground." I sighed. Sometimes I found my super-awesome spy school as a rip-off.
- Chapter 2:
Everybody loved Assignments. It's like you're a character in a video game. There are some issues, like one person's name should be called, go behind the curtain and do the assignments. Not like any other. Field assignments. I was the fifth to go. Amelia was in front of me. When she came back, her face was covered in black. "How'd it go?" I whispered. "Terrific." she said sarcastically. I stepped behind the curtain. Oh, my gosh! it was a robot! The robot spet towards me. I ducked out of the way. I picked up my stunning gun and hit the robot in the eye. Nothing happened. Nothing other than the robot charging at me, even angrier. I picked up three ropes. As soon as the robot charged, he smashed into the wall, and fell to the floor dizzily. Then I bound him with the ropes. "Well done, Arcelyn! You were the first one to defeat him...yet." My field assignment teacher, Dr.Parker, said to me. Smiling, I marched back to the classroom. *** In the fifth period, I realized that everyone had cuts or bruises. The robot had really clobbered them. The only ones who were unhurt were me and Jaclyn. Jaclyn's about, the second most popular in our grade. I know the first, but I'm not saying the name. Jaclyn had used a string trick to trip the robot- the heavyhead crashed into the ground and damaged all his parts. I wonder how may robots the school has manufactured. Needless to say, Dr.Parker wasn't very happy. I wasn't surprised, the way those guys were moaning. They act like such babies!....And I'm not very ready to tell this to Amelia. The way I see it, Jaclyn's just plain green-eyed jealous of me. I'm not sure why, she beats me at many other subjects. Like P.E and Maths and...oh. I don't think there are many. I was quite surprised to find my strategy on the robot was graded the highest. Amelia was second! She had cleverly used a laser on the robot and won, but she got blasted too. Jaclyn was the sixth last. There were people who had used much better strategies than her. I was quite embarrassed when Dr.Parker started blabbering a big speech about my "strategy" and "skill" and "efficiency." When Jaclyn heard about her marks, she went wild. She's my arch enemy so she's not very co-operative when I beat her. In lunch break, Jaclyn rounded on me. "How did you do it, Acyn?" she snapped. "It's Arcelyn, Jocelyn." I groaned. She knows I hate being called "Acyn". "Whatever! You beat me!" she said in her Oh-I'm-so-Babyish tone. "It's simple. I just let him bang into the wall and tie him up." I said, drawing calculations in the air as if a mathematical genius. Suddenly, Amelia came running at me. "Arcelyn! They're giving out free coal!" "Oh, boy!" I said joyfully. "I could do with a refill!" And with that, I sped away from Jaclyn.
- Chapter 3:
My rocket boots and Jetpack were refilled. I just took two pounds of extra coal, so I could get home easily. My house is at least three miles away from school. I arrived in half an hour because I ran like the wind. I have lots of coal at my house. I couldn't refill my boots because it takes another fifteen minutes loading up all that stuff. When school finally was over, I put on my rocket boots. When I passed Jaclyn, I heard her whisper to her brother Richard, "The haunted mansion. At night. We have to get it done." Wait, what? What were they talking about? *** At night, I loaded my rocket boots and flew to the haunted mansion. I needed to see what "work" they had to get done. I saw two figures with a torch in their hands. They had black shawls draped around their faces. Jaclyn and Richard, I thought. I tailed Jaclyn and Richard. They walked up to the first floor. It was hard to be silent on creaky wooden stairs. There was a lot of dust in the abandoned mansion. I resisted the temptation to sneeze. Jaclyn drew back the curtains. White moonlight streaked into the room, glittering on the mirrors, the window panes and showered light into the room. It looked beautiful. I wandered closer to Jaclyn and Richard- but something made me stop in my tracks. "This wand will do whatever you command." said Richard, presenting a glittery red stick with a small crystal on the tip. "Yes." Jaclyn hissed. "I shall become all powerful!" To my horror, she held the wand up- and blasted a hole in the roof! I couldn't help it. I screamed. Jaclyn and Richard froze in their tracks. I dashed down the staircase. "Who was that?" I could hear Richard upstairs. "I don't know." Jaclyn said fearfully. "I hope not Arcelyn"
- Chapter 4:
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waffles_4_ever Junior Fantagian
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| Subject: Re: Secret agents Sun Mar 18, 2012 7:42 am | |
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Blue Veteran Fantagian
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| Subject: Re: Secret agents Sun Mar 18, 2012 7:44 am | |
| Thank you! This is half-comedy, half-adventure. | |
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Winnowill Loyal Fantagian
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| Subject: Re: Secret agents Sun Mar 18, 2012 3:22 pm | |
| I really love the concept. c:
I would like to read more of this... | |
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Blue Veteran Fantagian
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| Subject: Re: Secret agents Mon Mar 19, 2012 3:07 am | |
| Many thanks. c: I'm working on chapter 2, Hopefully I'll finish till chapter four today... | |
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| Subject: Re: Secret agents Mon Mar 19, 2012 3:23 am | |
| I loved this, it's amazing ;3 | |
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| Subject: Re: Secret agents Mon Mar 19, 2012 3:27 am | |
| Thank youus everyone! C: I appreciate it. | |
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