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PostSubject: A story I made. (in progress)   Sat Jul 07, 2012 12:29 am

uh so
here's chapter one.
and stuff

http://alleternity.weebly.com/chapter-one1.html

Spoiler:
 

Critique?
tyvm.


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PostSubject: Re: A story I made. (in progress)   Sat Jul 07, 2012 12:34 am

I love it 1000000000000000000000000000000000000000/10 you should become a writer when you grow up
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PostSubject: Re: A story I made. (in progress)   Sat Jul 07, 2012 12:43 am

hi karen <3

I absolutely love how descriptive you are!

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PostSubject: Re: A story I made. (in progress)   Sat Jul 07, 2012 5:50 am

aw thanks everyone.
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PostSubject: Re: A story I made. (in progress)   Sat Jul 07, 2012 7:19 am

Wow! You have a really strong vocabulary. I enjoyed reading it. I would absolutely love to see more writing from you. Smile
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PostSubject: Re: A story I made. (in progress)   Sat Jul 07, 2012 8:26 am

Oh I love what's up so far, very descriptive. ;o
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PostSubject: Re: A story I made. (in progress)   Sat Jul 07, 2012 2:59 pm

yay thank you
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PostSubject: Re: A story I made. (in progress)   Sat Jul 07, 2012 3:01 pm

Your writing is awesome! The emotions are very strong and well described...
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PostSubject: Re: A story I made. (in progress)   Sat Jul 07, 2012 3:10 pm

Great! You have a very great vocabulary for your age! Also no one can touch your creative please contine to write and you could be so sucessful one day1 i rate it a millon
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PostSubject: Re: A story I made. (in progress)   Sat Jul 07, 2012 7:29 pm

anyone have a critique though?
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PostSubject: Re: A story I made. (in progress)   Sat Jul 07, 2012 7:41 pm

I do have a question. Is this being placed in war? I'm mostly interested because this sounds very much like a fictional-historic story, and I love history. And the fact that people are being "eliminated" sounds kind of actiony to mean. What's the genre is I may ask?

Except the fact that it may be a sad story.
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PostSubject: Re: A story I made. (in progress)   Sat Jul 07, 2012 10:31 pm

Abstract wrote:
I do have a question. Is this being placed in war? I'm mostly interested because this sounds very much like a fictional-historic story, and I love history. And the fact that people are being "eliminated" sounds kind of actiony to mean. What's the genre is I may ask?

Except the fact that it may be a sad story.
This will become more futuristic as the chapters go on, since it's based on the Apocalypse. I think it'll be more of a sci-fi ish, fiction, action book? Oh, and some romance.

Ha, this book is going all over the place, but that's really all I have to say for now.
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PostSubject: Re: A story I made. (in progress)   Sat Jul 07, 2012 10:59 pm

I might end up buying the book lol
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PostSubject: Re: A story I made. (in progress)   Sat Jul 07, 2012 11:28 pm

Ahh I see. I haven't read the book, but I'm not really a fan of sci-fi either.
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