ginger people my story by oliver.... THE NEXT CHAPTERª!!!!!

hey my adoring fans i really wanted to keep this story going cheers

here is chapter 1 incase you havent read it....

"samantha." nathaniel said
"what" she responded, it was quiet, like a leaf
"...i think im a ginger" samantha started to cry
"how are oyu gonna tell our parents"
"i wont"
then he moved out and had a girlfirned and because successful
just some advice Wink

there it is very good Smile

now lets put the second chapter

"listen natehaniel" the girlfriend said, her eyes were cold like whispers
"what!!"
"im ..... i want to marry you"
nathaniel used a memory eraser on girlfriend
"girlfirned will you marry me?" nathaniel said
"yes" she said
and they got married even though he was a ginger
just some advice Wink

Guest

Oliver, this is beautiful. You should become an author one day.. PLS CONTINUE IT.

Guest

That's awesome Very Happy

But you need to learn how to make things make a little more sense. Make the story gradual, not just say he took her memory.

I don't understand why people its so good. I think its okay, I just don't get it.

Guest

Andrea~ wrote:: I don't understand why people its so good. I think its okay, I just don't get it.

The concept is good. No offense but the litatire isn't the best, it could use improvement but the concept is the best.

thank you for the critik dark manor....
here is the third chapter

the honeymoon was arriving
"hey girlfirend" nathanaiel said
"what?" she asked quietly with whispersi n her eyes and ears and mouths
"i love you"
"me too"
he kissed her and her hair turned ginger, she laughed
"gingers" she said
"gingers" nathaniel replied
just some advice Wink

Guest

Haha Haha no problem! I lule the third chapter.

wow... wat a story

I like that "...her eyes were cold like whispers..." that really caught my eye =3=

well done c:

Great story. Well I'll tell you still, your words need to be typed in correct and I don't undestand ehydo you put that phrase after everytime you make a new one. Needs improvement but great story.

im crying this makes me sad i love it pls continue

oh my gawd
this is beautiful

Gorgeoussss....Hilarious.

very niceeee it's amazing c,:

Aha, I love this. xD

I also love chapter 3, idk why, but it makes me sad. :c (good kinda sad c:)

I think its good.I don't get it though and the grammar is a little off so I don't understand but if you fixed it both it will be AWESOME! :] good story

Oliver wrote:: hey my adoring fans i really wanted to keep this story going
here is chapter 1 incase you havent read it....

"samantha." nathaniel said
"what" she responded, it was quiet, like a leaf
"...i think im a ginger" samantha started to cry
"how are oyu gonna tell our parents"
"i wont"
then he moved out and had a girlfirned and because successful
just some advice

there it is very good now lets put the second chapter

"listen natehaniel" the girlfriend said, her eyes were cold like whispers
"what!!"
"im ..... i want to marry you"
nathaniel used a memory eraser on girlfriend
"girlfirned will you marry me?" nathaniel said
"yes" she said
and they got married even though he was a ginger
just some advice

This is confusing....

My new favoriite story from oliver
it made me tear up Like a Star @ heaven

this is really good continue it

I'm no expert at writing stories, but I think the grammar needs improvement. The spelling is good, sometimes there's a little bit of spelling mistakes.
But the story itself is still excellent. (:

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