Makki's crit thread no 4

A'ight. So I heard y'all want some critique, yeah? I've made crit threads before, you can check them if you want to see how I crit (been doing them since before larl even existed, he heheh)

I'll try to be thorough and fair as possible.

PS: I can also do writing, but stay under ~300 words

Can you critique my reaslitic drawing... Search for it...

okay

Here ya go:

Makkine, i learned the eyes across the face trick in art class! :p

Heres something i made for fun.

Not that much shading.

GOT I MESSED UP ON THE FACE SO MUCH D: I made this when i was like, what 7?

Also the dolphin tatoo. ALOT ON THE EARS... the absol...

I didnt try to make it look that realistic...

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Can you do this one I just want to make sure I did the anatomy right...

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The reference picture I used is on the top there. Too lazy to remove it.

Here is my artwork! I messed up on the neck though.

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I love your critiques Makkine! I don't do a ton of art, but when I do after reading your critiques, they help a lot!

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I messed up on the coloring
Its not a recent drawing, and mt 2nd time using a tablet but I want critique on it anyways. I kinda want more critique on the shading and coloring, I really want to improve in those areas, but also critiqe on the anomy, even though this is out dated.

Thank you in advance

could you critique this?

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i'm looking for a lot of help on it!!

Snowflake and rufistar, I'm starting with the ones that are easier to crit. Yours are coming up. Marshy, if you want me to do something outdated, could you tell me what to focus on? I don't want to crit points you've already learnt about ....

hop: http://prntscr.com/o5eca
(The work shown is Martirio di San Pietro by Caravaggio)


Clockwork: http://prntscr.com/o5e6h
Couldn't find the tutorials I was thinking of, sorry!

Can you critique my writing?
This is about the Hunger Games, ok? I WAS BORED. Here it is.
Waverly woke up breathing heavy, her heart pounding like a drum. She was shivering, even though her room was about 70 degrees Fahrenheit. She didn't want to get up but she had to. Today was the Reaping. She forced herself up and made her bed, then got her clothes and trudged into the bathroom to change. She came out wearing the usual, jeans and a t-shirt. She went into the kitchen to find that her mom was still asleep, so she quietly ate a piece of bread and gulped down a cup of juice. Then she brushed her hair and put it into a slightly messy ponytail, not really caring anyways. Her mom walked in, so happy about today that she didn't even bother to say good morning.

Makkine wrote:

Snowflake and rufistar, I'm starting with the ones that are easier to crit. Yours are coming up. Marshy, if you want me to do something outdated, could you tell me what to focus on? I don't want to crit points you've already learnt about ....

hop: http://prntscr.com/o5eca
(The work shown is Martirio di San Pietro by Caravaggio)

thank you very much fr the help! yeah, i know about action lines, but I've never really used them before. i'll definitely try using it in the future!!