Wizzy Loyal Fantagian
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| Subject: Dear Diary Part 1. The escape Fri Jan 04, 2013 12:57 am | |
| This took HOURS to think of i hope you like!! ** The Bolds are the Dear Diary** - Short Summary:
A girl named Claire ran away from her house for a better life. While traveling she found a house with 3 girls: Emma,Trina,and Gina. But when Emma tells Claire about school she gets totally confused Trina and Gina are 1 year older then Claire but they give Claire a hard time.
Its looong - part 1:
Dear Diary [Story]
**Hi Guys My name is Claire i have pale white skin, pink lips, blue eyes,and long wavy hair.**
Dear Diary, I’ve always wondered how “outside” feels. I always been stuck in this no fashioned house,and i decided to run away. So here it goes... I grab my suitcase, and put clothes,foods,books, and my diary in here. I go to my dad’s room and take some money from his wallet. I kiss him and my mom good-bye, still in their sleep. I gently open the door but a single tear runs down my cheek. But i still go. While running and running AND running, i finally found a spot by a tree,so i go by it,and open my diary. Dear Diary, So i finally found my place to be. I wonder how this is going to feel. Right Now i’m under a Apple Tree. I’m feeling hungry so i’ll get an apple. Bye Diary!!!. Finally,i made it up the huge Apple Tree. I got an ripe fresh apple, and bit into it. ‘Yum-my!’ I said. After i was done i jumped down the tree and fell with a thud. ‘Oww’ I said almost whining. A bruise came on my arm, which really hurted. ‘I need to find a home quick!’ Claire traveled day and night non-stop and finally find a house. ‘Its about time i found a house!’. Claire knocked on the door and waited. She heard foot steps coming her way. Slowly, the door open and there was 2 little kids at least 1 year older then Claire. “Hahaha and who are you? You looked like you got runned over by a elephant.” The first girl said. Claire felt some tears but tried to hold it in. “Oh look! the little bwaby abwout two cry!! boo hoo now shoo!” The second girl said with a grin, giggling. “Claire couldn’t take it and turned around starting to walk away. But a tall girl who looked like the two girls maybe the older sister, came to the door. ‘Wait! don’t leave’. Clair turned around and wiped a tear. ‘You can stay with us!!’ The older girl told Claire. “Say what??” The two girls answered at the same time. “Oh shush it”. “Come on in!”. Claire tooked baby steps into the house. ‘Wow i never saw a house like this!!’ Claire was amazed. “ Let me introduce you to your room” The older girl said. “Umm” Claire was confused. “What are your names?” The older girl answered. “I’m Emma” She said. “And i’m Gina.” The first girl said not very happy that she was staying. “And i’m Trina” The second girl said. “Oh your sounds-” Claire was cut off. “Be quiet!! people asked why are our names so similar” The first yelled. “oook??” Claire just asked Emma where her room was. “Oh here you’ll have the middle bunk.!” Emma said happily. “NO WAY!! SHE’S SLEEPING WITH US?!?!” The two girls shrieked. “Time out for both of you!! Go in the corner both of you!” Emma got mad. While the girls were in the corner mumbling. Claire wanted to write in her diary. I’m gonna write in my diary now.” Claire threw her suitcase in her bed and sat on the floor and opened her diary. Dear Diary, Well, i found my home right here! Although i have to deal with to pains: 1. gina and 2. Trina. Ugh they totally make my life miserable. but one girl i DO like: Emma. she’s the most Mature one out of the 3. Well i hope you have a good time bye!!. ‘Claire!! get ready to unpack your stuff and get dressed up. We are going school shopping in 10 minute’s!’ Emma Told Clair. “S-s-school??” “What’s school?” Clair was puzzled. “Woah you never went to school in your homeland?” Emma was shocked. Gina giggled a little. “I don’t know school who’s school?” Trina and Gina couldn’t take it. They laughed and laughed. “School isn’t a name dummy!” Gina said. “School’s a place where you learn and make friends” Trina said. “Oooh school sounds like fun!” Claire was excited. “But your not gonna be popular!” Gina and Trina said. “P-popular?” claire stuttered. “Ugh don’t even get me started on popular.” Trina was annoyed by ‘Claire’. “Just ignore them” Emma told Claire. “They are a pain.”. “Yes indeed.” Claire said. “Oops!!” Claire covered her mouth. “Why did i say that??”
Pheww that tooked a long time. Critique please. (Btw first story ) Also any tips?? | |
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taehyung Veteran Fantagian
Posts : 3089 Join date : 2011-07-15 Age : 23 Location : somewhere
| Subject: Re: Dear Diary Part 1. The escape Fri Jan 04, 2013 1:08 am | |
| This story is interesting! I wish for more! Best story I've ever read online till now | |
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Wizzy Loyal Fantagian
Posts : 1751 Join date : 2012-02-14 Age : 21 Location : fire on the poopdeck
| Subject: Re: Dear Diary Part 1. The escape Fri Jan 04, 2013 2:27 am | |
| Thanks L.O.L!!! Now i got to think of part 2 D-: | |
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Daisy Veteran Fantagian
Posts : 3369 Join date : 2011-12-22 Age : 24 Location : In Hell, With Sebastian..
| Subject: Re: Dear Diary Part 1. The escape Fri Jan 04, 2013 3:35 am | |
| Yes indeed.. Her second voice xD.. well I love the story, I was shock why Emma let Clarie stay on their house and have school.. still confusing but trailing,, Sooo better make the part 2.. ^^ | |
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