~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1

Former Staff Posts : 3165 Join date : 2010-01-27

Can't wait for ch.4!

But seriously STOP FIGHTING please!

Nicki- Stop with the meanness please! Looser? No way...

Sharp- Please just stop with the fighting. There is no way this will end if you continue it.

Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Thu Feb 25, 2010 6:19 pm

Sorry for being inactive. Ch. 4 will be released tonight! I promise!

Former Staff Posts : 1131 Join date : 2010-01-26

Coolio.
Nice story. ;P
-waits for the next chaptuh-

EDIT:

LOL, I keep thinking I'm going to be the ghost or something. .-.

Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Fri Feb 26, 2010 10:41 am

sharpsul99 wrote:: Sorry for being inactive. Ch. 4 will be released tonight! I promise!

Gasp! It never came out! ahaha (;

Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Feb 27, 2010 6:27 pm

Chapter 4 is out! Get ready for Chapter 5~ Truth & Fate !

Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Sat Feb 27, 2010 7:01 pm

That was sooo awesome Sharp!!!!!!!!!

Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Mon Mar 01, 2010 4:15 pm

You just want me to bump your topic, ugh....

Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Mon Mar 01, 2010 4:32 pm

Beauty26 wrote:: You just want me to bump your topic, ugh....

I never said that?! I just wanted people to appreciate my story!

Former Staff Posts : 3165 Join date : 2010-01-27

I like the 4th chapter. Good

Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Mon Mar 01, 2010 4:38 pm

cool, but freaky.

Loyal Fantagian Posts : 1834 Join date : 2010-01-26

good story.. kinda crepy lol

Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Tue Mar 02, 2010 4:23 pm

Chapter 5 will come out this evening! Thanks for the patience everybody!

Former Staff Posts : 3165 Join date : 2010-01-27

Awesome! Can't wait for ch. 5!

Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Tue Mar 02, 2010 5:07 pm

Hey Sharp!!!!!!
This Story roxs
my story stinks ur rite
i stoped writing it lol
sooo i saw u on fantage did u see me??

Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Wed Mar 03, 2010 7:35 pm

The new chapter will be out by 9:30! I promise!

Former Staff Posts : 1131 Join date : 2010-01-26

okie dokie then ._.

Moderator Posts : 9590 Join date : 2010-02-07 Age : 24

Okie Sharp :D Can't wait :P It was an awesome story!

Lolz, this is my third time reading it! My favorite part was when everybody was flying out of the window XD

My Mistake. The new chapter will be out at 8:00 PM!

My Mistake.

The new chapter will be out at 8:00 PM!

Former Staff Posts : 3165 Join date : 2010-01-27

Can't wait for CH.5! It's gonna be awesome!

I can't see it, 'cause your 8:00pm. if MY 9:00pm. =Bedtime

I can't see it, 'cause your 8:00pm. if MY 9:00pm. =Bedtime

Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Thu Mar 04, 2010 6:27 pm

Thats OK. You can see it tomorrow morning? I'll try to release it as early as possible.

Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Thu Mar 04, 2010 6:58 pm

k sharp

Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Thu Mar 04, 2010 8:14 pm

The Dialog is nice, and the pictures help users follow along with the story. Your grammar looks fine. The story is moving along much to fast. (Yes you are doing this on an online game base, but you could still add paragraphs of more detail.) The plot is also a bit ragged. In a summary its like this, "Your characters happy people like him. A girl decides she doesn't. You get attacked by ghosts, Boom Boom!" Like I said just slow it down a bit. Maybe add some smaller problems. Let certain characters have a little more personality. Overall this stories becoming rather nice. Keep it up.

Subject: Re: ~Sharp the Fantagian~ #1 Fri Mar 05, 2010 8:47 pm

Chapter 5~ Truth & Fate is out!

Starring:

Strawberry2424
Pinkys/Pinkkitty25

Moderator Posts : 9590 Join date : 2010-02-07 Age : 24

sharpsul99 wrote:: Chapter 5~ Truth & Fate is out!

Starring:

Strawberry2424
Pinkys/Pinkkitty25

The story was great!

Can't wait for more!

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