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yvonnelol Senior Fantagian
Posts : 346 Join date : 2010-03-20 Location : This is a new episode of Punk'd.
| Subject: One More Chance Thu Dec 23, 2010 4:43 pm | |
| Prologue- Spoiler:
Emily was a newborn baby. "Would you like to name your baby?" asked the nurse. Emily's mom said, "I would like to name her Emily." "Emily! What a nice name for her!" the nurse exclaimed. The nurse went outside with Emily, and worked on the birth certificate. Her mom was breathing deeply and letting the air out to calm down. Emily was delivered to her mom. They went home and put Emily in her crib. Emily smiled and cooed. Chapter 1: Preschool, Age 5- Spoiler:
On the first day of preschool, the preschoolers gave an introduction. "Hi my name is Emily. My favorite animal is a cat and my favorite color is pink." Emily said. She sat down on the tape with her name on it, taped on the rug. After the introduction, they went outside playing on the play structure, called a playground. Some preschoolers were playing "Follow the Leader", but they actually called it "Stalk the Leader" which meant the same thing. Emily made new friends and played tag together. "Tag you're it!" said her new friend, Elizabeth. Emily's new friends are named Elizabeth, Neda, Tasha, and Lenny. After that, it was nap time. "The most quiet one will wake up the kids with a wand." Ms. Shalla, the teacher, whispered. Emily tried to be the most quiet person so she could wake up kids with a wand. Turned out Lena, Lenny's sister, was the person to wake up the kid, AND the wand was actually a RULER! Nap time was now over. It was lunchtime! Yippee!, Emily thought. They went to the table and ate their lunches. After lunch, they went home. Best day ever!, Emily thought. Chapter 2: Danger! Danger!, Age 7- Spoiler:
Emily's parents were heading to the store. They were drove straight to the liquor. "You will have to stay in the car alone." Emily's mom said. Her parents went inside the store while Emily stayed in the car. She saw a stranger opening the car door. What was the stranger going to do? The stranger grabbed Emily out of the car, and they both went outside and walked somewhere. Oh no! Emily has been abducted! Her parents walked back to the car and saw nobody in it. "Oh, no, no, no!" her mom said. "Emily's gone!" "Maybe she got abducted or she ran away?!" Emily's dad said. Her parents got in the car, drove home, and called the cops. "Hello, may I help you?" said the police. "Yes, yes. My daughter is missing!" Emily's mom said. "May you give some information about the missing person?" the cop said. As we know, Emily's mom gave information about Emily. Her parents taped signs that said, "LOST PERSON Please call us if found." The cops searched for Emily while her parents were taping signs. Emily was begging to have one more chance at life to have a better one. To be continued...
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| | | sahilin Senior Fantagian
Posts : 356 Join date : 2010-11-01 Location : Good Question.
| Subject: Re: One More Chance Thu Dec 23, 2010 4:44 pm | |
| I like it! Emily is a pretty name! Infact, I had that name for french class last year! =) | |
| | | ♥cherry♥ Senior Fantagian
Posts : 436 Join date : 2010-12-09 Location : Up your butt and around the corner
| Subject: Re: One More Chance Thu Dec 23, 2010 8:33 pm | |
| DO U LIKE WAFFLES? [YEA I LIKE WAFFLES] DO U LIKE PANCAKES? [YES I LIKE PANCAKES] DO U LIKE FRENCH TOAST? [YES I LIKE FRENCH TOAST] DO DO DO DO CANT WAIT TO GET A MOUTH FULL! xDD | |
| | | bladerunner22 Devoted Fantagian
Posts : 530 Join date : 2010-11-27 Age : 24 Location : Asia
| Subject: Re: One More Chance Fri Dec 24, 2010 1:55 am | |
| um sissy, off topic... nice prolouge. like the name for the baby too! | |
| | | racchel2107 Senior Fantagian
Posts : 270 Join date : 2010-11-12 Age : 28 Location : venus!
| Subject: Re: One More Chance Fri Dec 24, 2010 8:29 am | |
| ihappy christmas everyone!!!!!11 | |
| | | pokeranger Hero Fantagian
Posts : 5454 Join date : 2010-01-29 Age : 24 Location : Loading...
| Subject: Re: One More Chance Fri Dec 24, 2010 9:19 am | |
| I think that's a preview. The name Emily's nice! | |
| | | Nakira Dedicated Fantagian
Posts : 1137 Join date : 2010-07-12 Age : 27 Location : the groan zone
| Subject: Re: One More Chance Fri Dec 24, 2010 2:41 pm | |
| Hmm, this story seems pretty good. I don't see much of a plot, but since the story just began, I just have to be patient. xD | |
| | | ♥cherry♥ Senior Fantagian
Posts : 436 Join date : 2010-12-09 Location : Up your butt and around the corner
| Subject: Re: One More Chance Fri Dec 24, 2010 3:03 pm | |
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| | | yvettelol New Fantagian
Posts : 10 Join date : 2010-12-22 Age : 20
| Subject: Re: One More Chance Mon Dec 27, 2010 5:59 pm | |
| cool story i got a little scared when i read chapter 2 | |
| | | nymphie Passionate Fantagian
Posts : 769 Join date : 2010-09-11 Age : 24 Location : Hogwarts School of Witchcraft and Wizardry
| Subject: Re: One More Chance Mon Dec 27, 2010 7:32 pm | |
| i will be honest not much of a plot. | |
| | | pokeranger Hero Fantagian
Posts : 5454 Join date : 2010-01-29 Age : 24 Location : Loading...
| Subject: Re: One More Chance Tue Dec 28, 2010 12:06 am | |
| Story line is moving too fast for me... ;P It seems interesting though | |
| | | bladerunner22 Devoted Fantagian
Posts : 530 Join date : 2010-11-27 Age : 24 Location : Asia
| Subject: Re: One More Chance Tue Dec 28, 2010 4:31 am | |
| You need to make your chapters a little bit longer. And with more description. | |
| | | racchel2107 Senior Fantagian
Posts : 270 Join date : 2010-11-12 Age : 28 Location : venus!
| Subject: Re: One More Chance Tue Dec 28, 2010 4:49 am | |
| make the chapters a bit longer is bladerunner said and make the sentences longer too
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