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+8Pommu-pon Janelle Blackrose Bubbles . w . Blue Abbey cxidanni 12 posters |
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cxidanni Regular Fantagian
Posts : 135 Join date : 2011-09-09 Location : Australia.
| Subject: i wrote a story quyzzz. :DDDDDDDD Thu Sep 22, 2011 3:32 am | |
| wunse upon a tym der waz a princes calld angela. angela livd in a big casle and kissd a prinse calld fred, fred nd angela ran awaii nd da evil wich got angrii nd sent a poison apple to kil dem both. angel died nd fred survived so da evil wich got a knife and stabbed him in the heart, nice and slowly, grinning icily with pleasure as she listened to his sweet screams break the silence of the night, dark blood dripping down his back as he fell to the ground, filling his lungs with precious oxygen for the last time. nd dat waz mi story quyz, they all lived happily evr aftr. u lyk? ;DDDDDD | |
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Abbey Former Staff
Posts : 1462 Join date : 2010-07-18 Age : 25 Location : IG @the.abbsta
| Subject: Re: i wrote a story quyzzz. :DDDDDDDD Thu Sep 22, 2011 3:37 am | |
| That's truly a divine piece of literature. I find your usage of grammar absolutely and completely creative, although it is not perfect, it is imperfect in such a way that it adds character to the piece. I applaud you, and thank you for blessing me with the gift to read your wonderful works. | |
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Blue Veteran Fantagian
Posts : 3257 Join date : 2011-05-04 Age : 110 Location : How am I supposed to know? D; LOCATING MYSELF IS HARD.
| Subject: Re: i wrote a story quyzzz. :DDDDDDDD Thu Sep 22, 2011 3:54 am | |
| It's got a good usage of English. Nice work on it! | |
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cxidanni Regular Fantagian
Posts : 135 Join date : 2011-09-09 Location : Australia.
| Subject: Re: i wrote a story quyzzz. :DDDDDDDD Thu Sep 22, 2011 4:16 am | |
| - Abbey wrote:
- That's truly a divine piece of literature. I find your usage of grammar absolutely and completely creative, although it is not perfect, it is imperfect in such a way that it adds character to the piece. I applaud you, and thank you for blessing me with the gift to read your wonderful works.
thnx its apreciated. | |
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. w . Senior Fantagian
Posts : 298 Join date : 2011-09-18
| Subject: Re: i wrote a story quyzzz. :DDDDDDDD Tue Sep 27, 2011 4:31 pm | |
| oh my god my .... well someone is named fred
Dont want to talk about it U U ^ | |
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Bubbles Loyal Fantagian
Posts : 1823 Join date : 2011-08-28 Age : 23 Location : I dunno know. Guess
| Subject: Re: i wrote a story quyzzz. :DDDDDDDD Sat Oct 01, 2011 12:28 pm | |
| you know for a first try it wasn't so half bad your language or spelling could use a tune up but it's pretty creative [: | |
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Blackrose Hero Fantagian
Posts : 7338 Join date : 2010-07-20
| Subject: Re: i wrote a story quyzzz. :DDDDDDDD Sat Oct 01, 2011 12:32 pm | |
| i agree with abbey it's a wonderful piece of art with colorful language (not the bad kind the good kind) | |
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Janelle Veteran Fantagian
Posts : 4931 Join date : 2011-02-28 Age : 21 Location : ur mom
| Subject: Re: i wrote a story quyzzz. :DDDDDDDD Sat Oct 01, 2011 12:39 pm | |
| What a wonderful story | |
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. w . Senior Fantagian
Posts : 298 Join date : 2011-09-18
| Subject: Re: i wrote a story quyzzz. :DDDDDDDD Sat Oct 01, 2011 12:40 pm | |
| Lol clap clap clap Hooray! | |
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Pommu-pon Loyal Fantagian
Posts : 1597 Join date : 2011-05-09 Age : 25 Location : wwwwww
| Subject: Re: i wrote a story quyzzz. :DDDDDDDD Sat Oct 01, 2011 12:41 pm | |
| What language is this? Last time I checked, the first word in each sentence started with a capital letter. If the story was English then the words would most likely be English. And I thought and started with an 'A'. U; spelt 'you' and not just a letter?
Anyways, I barely understood this. Grammar effort - 0/10 Plot - 4/10 Originallity - 5/10
On average, that's 3/10 for the whole story.
Sorry. I would have shown more sympathy and put more interest in reading your story if you had put more interest in typing out sentences properly. Trust me, I love tragic and bloody stories. They're my favourite categories. I myself write literature both in English and French. I know what I'm saying and suggest you follow my advice in future. | |
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melanie555 Rookie Fantagian
Posts : 35 Join date : 2011-11-09 Age : 95 Location : In your bedroom closet.. o.o ♥ I'm watching you. (;
| Subject: Re: i wrote a story quyzzz. :DDDDDDDD Sun Nov 13, 2011 1:13 pm | |
| - Miki-lu wrote:
- What language is this? Last time I checked, the first word in each sentence started with a capital letter. If the story was English then the words would most likely be English. And I thought and started with an 'A'. U; spelt 'you' and not just a letter?
Anyways, I barely understood this. Grammar effort - 0/10 Plot - 4/10 Originallity - 5/10
On average, that's 3/10 for the whole story.
Sorry. I would have shown more sympathy and put more interest in reading your story if you had put more interest in typing out sentences properly. Trust me, I love tragic and bloody stories. They're my favourite categories. I myself write literature both in English and French. I know what I'm saying and suggest you follow my advice in future. The language is slang.. And yeah I don't know... I hope he/she doesn't write like this in school.. But great story other then the grammar.. *claps* | |
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candyx3ii Rookie Fantagian
Posts : 37 Join date : 2011-12-03 Age : 28 Location : Los Angeles
| Subject: Re: i wrote a story quyzzz. :DDDDDDDD Tue Dec 06, 2011 11:37 am | |
| You should take a creative writing class.
8/10 | |
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Misty Life Regular Fantagian
Posts : 150 Join date : 2012-03-13 Age : 20 Location : I'll tell you later, I'm eating a cookie
| Subject: Re: i wrote a story quyzzz. :DDDDDDDD Sun Mar 25, 2012 2:45 pm | |
| guys its just lazy typing nothing special. Here's some of the translations:
u-You
Dat- that
R- are
ur- Your
k- Kay
And it goes on and on and on, I put my hands up in the air so high saying....
HEY OH GOTTA LET GO! ............................awkward................................
PS. 7.5/10 for your story:) | |
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ashsal833 Senior Fantagian
Posts : 292 Join date : 2011-07-04 Location : AZ
| Subject: Re: i wrote a story quyzzz. :DDDDDDDD Sun Mar 25, 2012 3:36 pm | |
| Use better grammer but wonderful! | |
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