Bluerivers1 Senior Fantagian
Posts : 461 Join date : 2010-02-06 Location : ojfirhfirghugb
| Subject: The Lonely Ones Wed Apr 21, 2010 2:18 pm | |
| Chapter One "Alicia, hold your tongue!" My mother admonished as I began, almost, to talk. I sat in my wooden chair obediently, but I was too stone-faced to answer. Since my parents' divorce, my life had been a pile of bleak events just waiting to be done, and there was nothing to look forward to. Now, in this custody battle, I sat in court like a good little girl and listened. The judge tapped her mallet to her little pad thingy. "From proven events, I now legally grant full custody of Alicia Griston to her father, Martin Griston. Court adjourned." My father hugged his parents, as my mother hugged hers. Then my dad took my hand and led me out, as my mother had to be held back by security guards. "YOU CAN'T TAKE HER AWAY FROM ME! SHE'S MY BABY! SHE'S MY BABBYYY!" My mother had never been so frazzled. I looked down. I saw Mom's glistening eyes tear straight into mine. I looked away from her, and I wanted to cry, too. But I couldn't, because if I did, I'd lose more of myself, and it would drip to the ground, and be stepped on, and then, washed away forever. I made sure I was equipped with confidence. Suddenly, camera flashes blinded me. "Alicia, how does it feel to have your parents divorced?" A reporter asked. I pushed them away. Being a Hollywood starlet was nothing it was cracked up to be. | |
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Oliver Moderator
Posts : 4588 Join date : 2010-03-03 Age : 23 Location : *lights up a fire* yeah, trying to surivve in a fores.t *smokse a cig* il kill you
| Subject: Re: The Lonely Ones Wed Apr 21, 2010 2:20 pm | |
| A typical story line, but I like your wiritinng style. | |
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bluesea Senior Fantagian
Posts : 399 Join date : 2010-04-09 Age : 27 Location : Happy Land :)
| Subject: Re: The Lonely Ones Wed Apr 21, 2010 4:08 pm | |
| i looking forward to the next chap. ur a great author!! | |
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taya1087 Regular Fantagian
Posts : 115 Join date : 2010-03-17 Age : 25
| Subject: Re: The Lonely Ones Wed Apr 21, 2010 4:28 pm | |
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Oliver Moderator
Posts : 4588 Join date : 2010-03-03 Age : 23 Location : *lights up a fire* yeah, trying to surivve in a fores.t *smokse a cig* il kill you
| Subject: Re: The Lonely Ones Sat Apr 24, 2010 9:29 am | |
| oh yeah, btw, like you said to beauty once. Make it sound "Teenish" Beside that, and the idea is a little overused, good job. | |
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