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| Subject: Angela (SCARY STORY FULL) Fri Jun 29, 2012 12:00 pm | |
| So my friend and I have been writing a bit for a contest in school I wanted to have you guys read it please c: - what it's about:
The story is about a man (Charles) and his daughter (Angela, age:8 ) who move to Georgia from a small town called Niagra lake. Angela was running around one day and she bumped her head on a shelf with an old vase on it, her dad heard crying from the other room so he went to investigate, only to find Angela sitting there, cut and bloody, serraded glass and ashes covering her, this is when her father takes her to the hospital, she says she needs to use the restroom so she leaves the room, he heard a scream of pain from the other room, only to find Angela standing there, bloody scalpel (spelling is bad lololol) in her hand. He drove her home, he felt relieved that there was no evidence, no proof, that his sweet little Angela had done such a thing. Once they get home Charles says to Angela "Don't worry baby girl, we'll find some help." She then says "Nobody can help me daddy, not even God!" She ran upstairs, and he followed, only to find her screaming. This is where the next scene takes place.
- The story!!:
I rushed downstairs to prepare for what was to come next I didn't want to hurt my daughter so I went back upstairs to check on her, only to find her cleaning her room, she turned to me and said "Hi daddy, how are you?" She had a very haunting glint in her eye, by looking at her I could see she wasn't herself. She was taking chilling deep breaths while staring at me. I was way too freaked out, hoping it was just a nightmare, it wasn't, it was just the beginning.
A few days later she was fine after those bizarre incidents so I left her alone to go to work, after work I went to go visit my friends Zack and Amanda at the local bar, "You know, my daughter Angela has been acting kinda weird lately." I said "What do you mean weird?" asked Amanda I told both friends the story of what happened those few days ago "Um you know guys, it's getting late so I'd better go." said Zack "Dude you've never cared about time before." "Yeah I know, but I've got to go feed my cat." "Yeah whatever." I was on my way home and pulled into the drive way, walking up into the doorway I put my key in the key hole only to have trouble unlocking the door I look to my left side and I noticed the pool was red, so I went to investigate finding my neighbor's German Shepard, Chico, in the pool.Dead. Stabbed to death. I called out "ANGELA!" In reply I hear faintly "Yes Charles?" "What in the HECK have you done? And don't call me by my first name!" I scolded "I don't care, I can call you Charles if I want!" she said "OPEN THE DOOR. NOW." I screamed. She rushed downstairs, latched onto the door, and opened it. I looked into her eyes, they were rolled into the back of her head. "Why the (CENSORED) is the neighbors German Shepard in out pool?!" I looked back into her eyes, they were the lovely shade of blue that they once were. She started crying again, she looked down to her hand "I don't know daddy." I also looked down, bloody knife in her hand. We later went to go to the dog, still laying there as he was when I looked the first time. I took the knife from Angela, Sterilyzed it, and threw it into the dumpster across the street along with the dog carcus, We later went to bed. The next morning I walked downstairs seeing the usual, Agela eating breakfest. She looked up at me and said "Good morning, daddy." I replied " `morning baby girl.
Yes it's done! Well thats not all I have written, Thats just all I want to type, I'm tired,lol Crit please c: (no rude crit)
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ℓσкє Senior Fantagian
Posts : 312 Join date : 2012-06-20 Age : 22 Location : エドラス
| Subject: Re: Angela (SCARY STORY FULL) Fri Jun 29, 2012 10:46 pm | |
| It isn't really scary, but its quite good.
8/10 | |
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Pieee Senior Fantagian
Posts : 313 Join date : 2011-12-10 Location : drowning
| Subject: Re: Angela (SCARY STORY FULL) Sat Jun 30, 2012 1:13 am | |
| Wow this is really cool but you should make it scarier. | |
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Gymnastics 4 life Senior Fantagian
Posts : 420 Join date : 2011-10-21 Age : 24 Location : Oh my god dude, you just can't go asking where people live...
| Subject: Re: Angela (SCARY STORY FULL) Sat Jun 30, 2012 9:31 pm | |
| it gets scarier as you go along c: I'll post more | |
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emiko Veteran Fantagian
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| Subject: Re: Angela (SCARY STORY FULL) Sat Jun 30, 2012 9:36 pm | |
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