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Primrose
Ultimate Fantagian
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Join date : 2011-08-27
Age : 21
Location : District 12
| Subject: the Diamond Candle  Thu Oct 11, 2012 7:32 pm | |
| This is the book the Diamond Candle, which is read by characters in the RP: The Lost Library. This story includes characters from the RP, and others that belong to my imagination. This story will hopefully give you a feeling of suspense, near-death experiences, adventure, drama and some love. Some characters from the RP will die after Chapter 11, please don't be offended if your character dies. Chapter 1 - The Diamond Candle - Spoiler:
The sun rose slowly. The birds chirped joyfully, spreading the infinite happiness of a brand new day. However, the enjoyment didn't last that long. A few minutes later, there was a loud booming sound. Hope narrows her eyes and covers them with her skinny hands. "Oh, mother, I am really looking forward to today." She whispered. It was her first day of school. She takes out her diary and writes about it with great happiness.
I am so excited. The main reason is because my cousin, Aubrey, is comming back from Epyllotte, the village beside us! Aubrey and I are very close friends, and its hard for me to think of a life without her. She wrote. Hope closed her diary and looked in her mirror. She tied her straight blonde hair with a brown streak in a high ponytail and tied it in a blue bow. She puts her shirt on and a red skirt with patterns, then she puts on white stockings that go a little higher than the knees.
Chapter 2 - The Diamond Candle - Spoiler:
Hope arrives at her school. She finds her locker and opens it. She puts all her things on it and the ground starts shaking furiously. Many lockers collapse and things fall. Many crashing sounds are heard and when Hope looks through the window, she sees the kingdom beside them shatter into pieces.
Working on it.
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Lord Voldemort
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| | Subject: Re: the Diamond Candle Thu Oct 11, 2012 7:33 pm | |
| Wow, I love how you edited it.. COOL. Can I help you write it.. Just PM me or something and I will help out. Tell me what it's based on though, i'm good at writing stories. | |
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Primrose
Ultimate Fantagian
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Join date : 2011-08-27
Age : 21
Location : District 12
| | Subject: Re: the Diamond Candle Thu Oct 11, 2012 7:35 pm | |
| - Blackened~Waters wrote:
- Wow, I love how you edited it.. COOL. Can I help you write it.. Just PM me or something and I will help out. Tell me what it's based on though, i'm good at writing stories.
This is supposed to be the book that they read in my RP, Lost Library. | |
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Guest
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| | Subject: Re: the Diamond Candle Thu Oct 11, 2012 7:43 pm | |
| This is awesome. Tee hee I hope my character dies. Yeah i know XDD
but seriously kill her or something in chapter 20 or what ever XDD
Your good at writing |
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Primrose
Ultimate Fantagian
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| | Subject: Re: the Diamond Candle Thu Oct 11, 2012 7:52 pm | |
| - Clockworker's Doll wrote:
- This is awesome. Tee hee I hope my character dies. Yeah i know XDD
but seriously kill her or something in chapter 20 or what ever XDD
Your good at writing Thanks. I'll continue when I get inspired. | |
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Surpris3đ
Senior Fantagian
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Join date : 2010-12-15
Age : 24
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| | Subject: Re: the Diamond Candle Tue Oct 16, 2012 8:12 am | |
| Hmm... Not bad so far! Hope you could finish it! | |
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SilverBell
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| | Subject: Re: the Diamond Candle Tue Oct 16, 2012 9:57 am | |
| That's really good! Can't wait for my character to come in. | |
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Lord Voldemort
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| | Subject: Re: the Diamond Candle Thu Oct 18, 2012 5:12 pm | |
| I know it is for the RP lost library. I want you to let me help you write it? | |
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Primrose
Ultimate Fantagian
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Join date : 2011-08-27
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| | Subject: Re: the Diamond Candle Fri Oct 19, 2012 7:07 am | |
| - Blackened~Waters wrote:
- I know it is for the RP lost library. I want you to let me help you write it?
Sure, but I dont know how. | |
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| | Subject: Re: the Diamond Candle Thu Oct 25, 2012 12:16 am | |
| this is a very good piece of literature, and i like your use of figurative language!!! but you're changing the verb tense from past to present, and that's rather confusing. just be sure to either stay past or present throughout the whole story! but other than that, this is amazing!! | |
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Primrose
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| | Subject: Re: the Diamond Candle Thu Oct 25, 2012 4:15 pm | |
| - spookyhop wrote:
- this is a very good piece of literature, and i like your use of figurative language!!! but you're changing the verb tense from past to present, and that's rather confusing. just be sure to either stay past or present throughout the whole story! but other than that, this is amazing!!
Thanks for the support! | |
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Squirtle
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| | Subject: Re: the Diamond Candle Thu Oct 25, 2012 4:20 pm | |
| This is very good, and lots of nice words in it. | |
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Gabriella
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| | Subject: Re: the Diamond Candle Thu Oct 25, 2012 4:24 pm | |
| I hope you continue this story i love it | |
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