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Jamie
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PostSubject: It's just a doll.   Mon Jun 06, 2011 3:14 pm

Izumi had a toy collection, mostly out of dolls. Every night she had to cover them up because even though she was 23, she had a feeling about them..that they weren't just a toy. The strange thing was though, Izumi always woke up with the dolls on her bed..not on her shelf. Her 15 year old sister came in and laughed. "You think they are alive? Gosh, your just some dumb head," Haruka (her 15 year old sister) said. Izumi about ran out the window..but she just breathed in and out slowly. Then, Izumi forced Haruka out of her room.

Izumi tried to see if the dolls were alive but she heard no response. "M..D..." Izumi said softly trying to call her parents. She just stopped mumbling. Izumi thought for a minute.

Maybe..Haruka is tricking me? YEAH! I hope..
Izumi then set her dolls on the shelf again. This night she couldn't sleep. In midway sleep she heard shuffling and laughing..she was scared. She ran to turn on the lights. She saw a doll moving, ON IT'S OWN! She then ran for it. Wait..I'm midway sleeping...it's a dream RIGHT!? she thought.

The next morning she ran for the door. Then she went to her job. She slowly typed, and she was blinking once per hour. Izumi finally got home twitching. She saw the dolls running after her. They then pulled Izumi down to the ground. Izumi was screaming. The dolls threw her in a pit and burried her.

The End!

Sorry the end wasn't creative. I found the end kind of funny. ^^"
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PostSubject: Re: It's just a doll.   Mon Jun 06, 2011 3:26 pm

Why would the dolls do that?
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PostSubject: Re: It's just a doll.   Mon Jun 06, 2011 3:28 pm

kateyperry221 wrote:
Why would the dolls do that?
Well, how would you feel if you were forced on a shelf everytime you got off? xD
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PostSubject: Re: It's just a doll.   Mon Jun 06, 2011 3:30 pm

Jamie wrote:
kateyperry221 wrote:
Why would the dolls do that?
Well, how would you feel if you were forced on a shelf everytime you got off? xD

Ok..i woulda done the same thing...except i would of done better than the dolls did!!
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PostSubject: Re: It's just a doll.   Mon Jun 06, 2011 3:44 pm

Hm. Is this a story you wrote? It could use some editing. I felt the last paragraph sort of ran through. Almost as though you were rushing it. I lost my sense of time there, and I think you could edit that one a little. Adding a bit more detail would be great!
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PostSubject: Re: It's just a doll.   Mon Jun 06, 2011 3:54 pm

The end was funny; is that wrong for me to say? xD
Short, but I liked it!
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PostSubject: Re: It's just a doll.   Mon Jun 06, 2011 3:57 pm

Fantasygirl wrote:
Hm. Is this a story you wrote? It could use some editing. I felt the last paragraph sort of ran through. Almost as though you were rushing it. I lost my sense of time there, and I think you could edit that one a little. Adding a bit more detail would be great!

Yeah..I'll edit it when I get my creative sense back. ^^"
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PostSubject: Re: It's just a doll.   Mon Jun 06, 2011 4:26 pm

Jamie wrote:
Fantasygirl wrote:
Hm. Is this a story you wrote? It could use some editing. I felt the last paragraph sort of ran through. Almost as though you were rushing it. I lost my sense of time there, and I think you could edit that one a little. Adding a bit more detail would be great!

Yeah..I'll edit it when I get my creative sense back. ^^"

Awesome! Can't wait for you to get your creative sense back from the cleaners!
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PostSubject: Re: It's just a doll.   Mon Jun 06, 2011 4:31 pm

e_e And the fear deepens... pediophobia e_e
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