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PostSubject: Rocker-Tara   Rocker-Tara Icon_minitimeSun Jan 22, 2012 11:16 am

My new story Rocker-Tara, here are the characters
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This is just the summary not the story (yet)
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PostSubject: Re: Rocker-Tara   Rocker-Tara Icon_minitimeSun Jan 22, 2012 3:07 pm

It's a cool story line, however, you need to work on your grammar. There is huge run-on sentence in there, and I personally think that you should proofread your writing before posting.

Also, if you are creating the characters, then there would be no pictures of them on the internet. So instead of taking somebody else's art, I would suggest making it even more customized by drawing them on your own, or asking somebody you know to draw them for you. That way, they can look however you want them to, and they can be posing whichever way you want.
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PostSubject: Re: Rocker-Tara   Rocker-Tara Icon_minitimeSun Jan 22, 2012 3:08 pm

^^ Thanks for the advice ill work on it
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PostSubject: Re: Rocker-Tara   Rocker-Tara Icon_minitimeSun Jan 22, 2012 3:10 pm

*** Swag Down Pack *** wrote:
^^ Thanks for the advice ill work on it

No problem. Your story is in its early stages, so mistakes are likely, not bad.
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PostSubject: Re: Rocker-Tara   Rocker-Tara Icon_minitimeSun Jan 22, 2012 3:28 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Rocker-Tara   Rocker-Tara Icon_minitimeSun Jan 22, 2012 4:00 pm

Nice I can't wait to read it (:
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PostSubject: Re: Rocker-Tara   Rocker-Tara Icon_minitimeSun Jan 22, 2012 6:03 pm

Nice! As said above I can't wait to read it! (:

Off topic: kat_kat I like your avvi lol (:
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PostSubject: Re: Rocker-Tara   Rocker-Tara Icon_minitimeSun Jan 22, 2012 6:27 pm

Looks pretty interesting
Off-topic: Yay! My spacebar works again!! (:
I can't wait to see when it's complete.
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PostSubject: Re: Rocker-Tara   Rocker-Tara Icon_minitimeMon Jan 23, 2012 2:25 pm

The characters aren't emo enough. But it's pretty good, anyway.
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PostSubject: Re: Rocker-Tara   Rocker-Tara Icon_minitimeMon Jan 23, 2012 7:00 pm

Yuffiecrystal wrote:
The characters aren't emo enough. But it's pretty good, anyway.
How does that comply to the story..?
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I like the story, yet it seems kinda repetitive (there's tons of animes/mangas with a plot similar, and it seems kinda cliche). You have potential, though! c:
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PostSubject: Re: Rocker-Tara   Rocker-Tara Icon_minitimeMon Jan 23, 2012 7:55 pm

I really like the idea of an anime type story with musician characters. I do agree with Hop in that Google Images shouldn't limit your options for character appearance, although it can serve as an inspiration.
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PostSubject: Re: Rocker-Tara   Rocker-Tara Icon_minitimeMon Jan 23, 2012 8:15 pm

I really like the way you planned out the story. The only thing is, you need to work on your grammar. I really can't understand what your saying.

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