I'm writing a story. (On chapter 2)

I decided to write a story. I started writing about a few weeks ago, but then I went to Ecuador and there was absolute no internet connection. I also showed Infinite my story, and she helped me fix some of it. After a while, my ma' restarted the computer and I lost the story. Now I had to restart. Blarghdfsa I should've posted it on her before.

Heres what it's about:

Oyus. Let's spoil the story. <3

Spoiler:

Yes, stupidest story ever right?
But Peace might like it.
She likes love stories.
Yeh.


Psst. >w> I also need a banner maker. :3







GOSH DID I REALLY JUST POST THIS.

cool story i dont think its stupid the story i wrote only has like, three pages or something lol

It's good. c:

You should explain more of what happened.
ex:
"Her dad died of a tragic car crash"
You could've put
"He dad died during a car crash, as he was ___________________"
:]

Ani wrote:

It's good. c:

You should explain more of what happened.
ex:
"Her dad died of a tragic car crash"
You could've put
"He dad died during a car crash, as he was ___________________"
:]

Thank for the tip bro. :33
I was kinda lazy at that moment.

That's pretty good finn.

Thank you Melody. xD

That's pretty awesome.
WOOOO
BRING ON THE STORY~

NyancatRox wrote:

That's pretty awesome.
WOOOO
BRING ON THE STORY~

Bring on the ritz xD
Thanks bro. : D

what chu wrote :

There were a few grammatical/spelling issues such as Love instead of loved and dies instead of died but that can easily be fixed. I would like to see more about how that tragic car crash went (as creepy as it may seem this can be a great way to connect to a reader who had experienced something similar) As much as this seems strange... abuse is a very broad term. Maybe be a bit more specific (only if this is going to be kept and posted somewhere else, it might not be the most appropriate topic for this website lol).

Other than that I'm interested and would like to see a bit more :3

Relora wrote:

what chu wrote :

There were a few grammatical/spelling issues such as Love instead of loved and dies instead of died but that can easily be fixed. I would like to see more about how that tragic car crash went (as creepy as it may seem this can be a great way to connect to a reader who had experienced something similar) As much as this seems strange... abuse is a very broad term. Maybe be a bit more specific (only if this is going to be kept and posted somewhere else, it might not be the most appropriate topic for this website lol).

Other than that I'm interested and would like to see a bit more :3

Erm, I might fix it on the abuse part.

I think as long as the abuse isn't really graphic and all it can stay but for this website keep it as more of a tidbit.

wow its awsome