The haunted house ~ Chapter 1 Moving in.

Hello... My name is Eric and I am 9. I live in a house that is haunted.. I live with my 3 sisters, Tammy is 4 Jessica is 13 and Emily is 8. My parents think its nonsense but..its not I know its real. If you don't believe me then you should not be listening then. It all started on a warm sunny day, I sighed I had to move somewhere else without my friends. My best friends were: Anne Josh Joey and Emma.

A few days later.. My parents had said: " Alright Eric time to go!" As I loaded my stuff I noticed two girls chatting but one looked weird I thought " Its nothing.." Just then I heard a knock on the door. My mom said " Oh goody Goody!" She rushed to the door. One of the odd looking girls came in. She greeted my mom and dad. I kind of thought she was pretty. Her name was Maple. Just then I heard laughing coming from Tammy's room. I knocked on her door and shouted " COME ON TAMMY COMPANY!" then the laughing stopped I said " come on Tammy" I heard a creek on the door I said " Tammy are you trying to scare me?" After I could not take it anymore. I barged in. With a very scared and shocked face. I did not see Tammy. Come to think of it where are my sisters!?!? " Oh no Oh no!" I looked everywhere. Then I asked my parents " Where is Tammy Jessica and Emily? " My dad replied " Well Tammy is ASP now, and Jessica is out with her friends and last Emily is at her soccer game." Go EMILY he shouted. I sighed with relief. As the day went on.. It turned dark. I knew this house was haunted cob webs,Bats,and vampires and many more. As I walked out to get a midnight snack.. I heard a creek in Emily's room. I decided to check on her. Then I saw she was gone. And I sat there like a coward didn't know what to do in front of strangers. Just then the Strange woman said something.


I froze..


Wait for chapter 2~Marshell lee

wow freddy thats great even though i want to kill you bad

Its pretty good. It does need a bit of work though
Good job.

Wow love it. I can't wait for the next chapter. You did a pretty good job!

It needs work. i sense grammar mistakes. x3

Also you spelled, "Marshall Lee" wrong. lololol

Separate things in to Paragraphs. Meaning it needs work, since everything's kinda crumpled in two, one small and one big paragraph.

Other then that your doing a super job.

nice story freddy :]

Awesome Story

I think I can replace the first sentence c:

Instead of, "Hello... My name is Eric and I am 9. I live in a house that is haunted.." you could write "Hello... My name is Eric and I am 9. I live in a house that I know is haunted.

Just saying ^^

scary GOOD , confsing i lost track where i was heehee i thought it was really good