Chapter 1 (Beta - Un Written fully)

Aurora wrote:

@Mr.Taost Critiques are supposed to be constructive not downgrading goodness gracious. Give the kid a break he is only a few months older then you (Maybe even a year+a few months) I suggest you stop trying to start drama on HIS thread. It's off-topic and rude.

I totally agree with you

@mr.Taost you are being very rude

I Agree with the 2 above me.

I say that the Story is great, all he needs to do is improve. I used to be a bad author and now look at me, I already have 7 Chapters.

nice try Patrick.

/facepalm mmkai,heres whats wrong:
-I get its beta,but you need to make it a bit better,as in details ect.
-KEEP TRYING even though people might hate it,improve it and people will warm up to it
-STOP BLAMING STUFF thats why people are disagreeing with you,alls you do it blame stuff on someone/something
-BE GRAMMAR-SMART go on maybe mircosoft word and find out what you have spelled wrong.
hope SOME of it hepled (sorry if MY grammar is so bad,my mouse it acting crap-ish and so I have to put it on my laptop and put my arm on it xD)

xXlexiXx wrote:

/facepalm mmkai,heres whats wrong:
-I get its beta,but you need to make it a bit better,as in details ect.
-KEEP TRYING even though people might hate it,improve it and people will warm up to it
-STOP BLAMING STUFF thats why people are disagreeing with you,alls you do it blame stuff on someone/something
-BE GRAMMAR-SMART go on maybe mircosoft word and find out what you have spelled wrong.
hope SOME of it hepled (sorry if MY grammar is so bad,my mouse it acting crap-ish and so I have to put it on my laptop and put my arm on it xD)

/facepalm it sounds like your trying to correct him in a bad way

Kat_kat11 wrote:

xXlexiXx wrote:

/facepalm mmkai,heres whats wrong:
-I get its beta,but you need to make it a bit better,as in details ect.
-KEEP TRYING even though people might hate it,improve it and people will warm up to it
-STOP BLAMING STUFF thats why people are disagreeing with you,alls you do it blame stuff on someone/something
-BE GRAMMAR-SMART go on maybe mircosoft word and find out what you have spelled wrong.
hope SOME of it hepled (sorry if MY grammar is so bad,my mouse it acting crap-ish and so I have to put it on my laptop and put my arm on it xD)

/facepalm it sounds like your trying to correct him in a bad way

I'm not,I'm telling him what to do and how to keep from argueing,I'm facepalming others who ARE argueing...0.0 /minifacepalm

xXlexiXx wrote:

Kat_kat11 wrote:

xXlexiXx wrote:

/facepalm mmkai,heres whats wrong:
-I get its beta,but you need to make it a bit better,as in details ect.
-KEEP TRYING even though people might hate it,improve it and people will warm up to it
-STOP BLAMING STUFF thats why people are disagreeing with you,alls you do it blame stuff on someone/something
-BE GRAMMAR-SMART go on maybe mircosoft word and find out what you have spelled wrong.
hope SOME of it hepled (sorry if MY grammar is so bad,my mouse it acting crap-ish and so I have to put it on my laptop and put my arm on it xD)

/facepalm it sounds like your trying to correct him in a bad way

I'm not,I'm telling him what to do and how to keep from argueing,I'm facepalming others who ARE argueing...0.0 /minifacepalm

facepalm/ I was going to edit my post then u posted XD sorry though

but why are ppl correcting Patrick like really