| Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) | |
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Oliver Moderator
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| Subject: Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) Sun Apr 18, 2010 11:29 am | |
| Im making it here, cuz, it would be bumping if u commented in my first one. And I want to hear ur opinions. If u havnt read sugar lime, u should go to the old post to read chapters 1-5 Chapter 6- Odd behavior. Morning was as usual, I cooked the food with Sugar, and Hikaru-San ended up not being hungry. So me and Sugar eat it all. Putting on my pigtails and dress, I scurry back down. "Kouki-Sama, Sir!" I called out. "Mmhmm..." He mumbled without looking at me. His dark blue hair covered his "Goggles" (poser) as he sketched something on paper. "Do, you want, me, to do something?" His eyes were droopy. He was acting oddly, unlike himself. "Go take Sugar out or somethin." "Ok..." Worried it seemed I was. ... I dont like Hikaru-San, but it makes me fee uneasy when hes like this.
Chapter 7~ Hikaru-San's garden. I grabbed Sugars hand as she trained to kill Shadows. We scurried off to Hikaru-San's garden, where a bunch of rose buds shone happily. Grass was playing with crickets, and bees were having fun with Daisies. For a moment I thought why the world couldnt be like that? So many different creatures and colors, yet they were all friends, laughing and enjoying each other. Why couldnt we do that? As me and Sugar skipped along the garden, picking apples from trees and smelling flowers, we looked for bunnies.
It was a game for sugar, to look for these creatures. They were common, but Sugar thought of them as a gift of life. Its beautiful how she thought of this simple creature so greatly. We found about 5 bunnies. "Record!" Sugar Lime told me. "Yep!" I said joyfully. It was times like this when I forgot all of the troubles in the world. It was times like this when I felt like I was 5.
But suddenly, we saw a fox.
Chapter 9- Odd looks.
This fox, was ordinary, in size, shape, and speaking. BUT, this fox was wearing glasses. She had glasses right on her. As Me and Sugar stared at the fox, She twitched her two little ears, and suddenly, GOT CARRIED BY A OWL. A owl just swooped and carried it. Sugar started to cry. "Is the Sugar... foxy going Lime... to die?" "No..." After that I layed down. What I found odd, is how a owl carried the fox, and how come the fox wore glasses. Sugar grabbed me by the hand.
Chapter 10- Sugars dissapearence. We both layed down in the garden. The flowers slowly trickled our toes. I stood up and ruffled my dress, "Kk, ready to go back home now?" Sugar smiled. "LimeLime!" Standing up, we both started walking up to Hikaru-San's garden. But, Sugar stopped walking. "Hikaru-San." She called out, "Creator." "Master." "Berries." "Miku-Chan" When she said 'Miku-Chan' She suddenly started to fade. "Words" "Gun" "Hunting." "Towns." "Life" "Birth." "Body." "Real." "Fa-Fa-Fa-" "Fake.." She was barely noticable now. "I am fake." "You are real." "Thank you for the love." That was the most Sugar had ever said. "Love." And she dissapeared.
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bluesea Senior Fantagian
Posts : 399 Join date : 2010-04-09 Age : 28 Location : Happy Land :)
| Subject: Re: Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) Sun Apr 18, 2010 1:29 pm | |
| :O im excited for the next chapter!! its sooooooooooooo good!!! =D | |
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Vatt Senior Fantagian
Posts : 499 Join date : 2010-04-15 Age : 28 Location : Pizza Land
| Subject: Re: Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) Sun Apr 18, 2010 3:40 pm | |
| omg, i read the other chapters, and they were amazing, and this is amazing... i bet that dude is gonna die XD... not that that is good or anything OoOoO~Vatt~OoOoO | |
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taya1087 Regular Fantagian
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| Subject: Re: Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) Sun Apr 18, 2010 5:48 pm | |
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snake Former Staff
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| Subject: Re: Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) Mon Apr 19, 2010 12:40 pm | |
| Great job, Shinie! [: I love the story. <3 I'll be waiting on the next chapter. [: | |
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McKenna Former Staff
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| Subject: Re: Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) Mon Apr 19, 2010 12:56 pm | |
| This is a great story so far!
Maybe more descriptive?
Like describe what food your making/ what it looks like?
But great!
More! | |
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bloobunny Regular Fantagian
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| Subject: Re: Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) Tue Apr 20, 2010 1:27 pm | |
| soo cool! cant wait for more POST IT NOW!!! nah take your time XD | |
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Oliver Moderator
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| Subject: Re: Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) Tue Apr 20, 2010 4:04 pm | |
| Im gonna write chapter 7 Right now! | |
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Vatt Senior Fantagian
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| Subject: Re: Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) Tue Apr 20, 2010 6:20 pm | |
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Oliver Moderator
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| Subject: Re: Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) Tue Apr 20, 2010 9:29 pm | |
| Chapter 7 Is out! Fav chapter so far. | |
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v Moderator
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| Subject: Re: Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) Tue Apr 20, 2010 10:00 pm | |
| Chapter 7 is awesome! I can see why you like it. :3 | |
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bluesea Senior Fantagian
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| Subject: Re: Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) Wed Apr 21, 2010 11:42 am | |
| :O chap 7 is really good the description of nature shines like stars (L) cant wait for chap 8!!!!! wots guna happen to the fox? or wots guna happen to miku and sugarr?? | |
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Oliver Moderator
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| Subject: Re: Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) Tue May 11, 2010 6:05 pm | |
| LOL. XXDDD c-8-9 is out. Someone pwease critique. | |
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Vatt Senior Fantagian
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| Subject: Re: Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) Tue May 11, 2010 6:27 pm | |
| I bet the fox is Hikaru-San, lol, cause it had glasses, XD OoOoO~Vatt~OoOoO ps: plz dont make the foxie die, i love foxes alot, they are like... awesome, XD | |
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McKenna Former Staff
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| Subject: Re: Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) Tue May 11, 2010 6:30 pm | |
| - Kawaii Maker wrote:
- LOL.
XXDDD c-8-9 is out. Someone pwease critique. I sorta did.. XD A long time ago. I said maybe be a little more descriptive? | |
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Oliver Moderator
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| Subject: Re: Sugar Lime- A story by Kawaii Maker (Now in this post XD) Fri Jun 11, 2010 7:59 pm | |
| After 20,0000 years, theres a new chapter! ENJOY! | |
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