~Love is Pain~ A Love Story

Moderator Posts : 9590 Join date : 2010-02-07 Age : 24

Chapter 1 ~ New Crush

I quickly ran in the hall to my class.

Oh no! I'm almost late! I thought while running as fast as I can to room DD-2.

Right when the bell rung, I made it.

"Whew! Thought I was a gonner!" I said as I drooped in my seat.

"Miyeon, where have you been?" my best friend Katelyn asked as she sat beside me.

"Well, I-"

"Nevermind about that! New guy alert!" she said, setting her backpack down and smiling.

"Really? Where?! I wanna see! I wanna see!" I exclaimed, looking around.

"Right there... his name is Jacob." Katelyn said as she pointed at a boy walking to the seat right beside me.

"Ooh, he is cute! And he's sitting by us!" I happily said while looking at Jacob.

"Ok class, my name is..." the teacher began.
Blah blah blah... I have boy buisness. I thought in my mind while looking at Jacob.

"My name is Mrs. Tracy." she said, while writing her name on the board.

"Now, I will pass out a paper for you students to write all about yourself." Mrs. Tracy said while passing out binder paper.

I took out my baby blue pencil with my name carved on it, and began to write about myself.

*Ring! Ring!* the bell rung, as we quickly put our stuff away and lined up for recess.

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Wed May 12, 2010 8:59 pm

I like the story great job can't wait for chapter two

Moderator Posts : 9590 Join date : 2010-02-07 Age : 24

Thanks Gabby!

I'm writing Chapter 2 right now.

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Wed May 12, 2010 9:25 pm

That was the name I used in mai story!! xD oh wellz! Good story

Moderator Posts : 9590 Join date : 2010-02-07 Age : 24

Oops mai bad! Srry Poke! I'll change it.

I am SO SORRY! I forgot about that!

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Thu May 13, 2010 5:56 am

Good story. But it's like every other love story. A girl likes a guy and then they go out or something like that.

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Thu May 13, 2010 7:37 am

Beauty's right, you're doing good but it needs its own twist.

Moderator Posts : 9590 Join date : 2010-02-07 Age : 24

There's gonna be a twist alright... you'll see. Wink

The pain part in my title gives it out.

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Thu May 13, 2010 11:25 am

ooh i like it...cant wait for more ;D

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Thu May 13, 2010 1:46 pm

miyeon wrote:: There's gonna be a twist alright... you'll see.

The pain part in my title gives it out.

So your character likes a guy, then you go out then he breaks up with you or cheats?

I'm not being mean, I'm just giving you tips (;

You should have a different twist...

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Thu May 13, 2010 3:04 pm

Beauty, is again right...

You can't really make it 'special', because no breakup is special.

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Thu May 13, 2010 3:08 pm

ppl just let miyeon make her own story.
she sed thers a twist. so lets wait for the twist. (;

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Thu May 13, 2010 3:09 pm

Everyone's writing love stories lately...

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Thu May 13, 2010 3:17 pm

Bluerivers wrote:: Everyone's writing love stories lately...

Yeah.

Btw, wasn't I the first to write a love story here? Or was it you?

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Thu May 13, 2010 3:20 pm

You did, then I wrote one, but it was totally different.

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Thu May 13, 2010 3:21 pm

Bluerivers wrote:: You did, then I wrote one, but it was totally different.

Oh. Then I guess everyone got inspired or something. (after your story, too)

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Thu May 13, 2010 3:23 pm

Lol, thanks, but it's getting kinda spammy now...so many people are writing stories

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Thu May 13, 2010 3:26 pm

Bluerivers wrote:: Lol, thanks, but it's getting kinda spammy now...so many people are writing stories

Yeah, and they all have the same plot:

A girl likes a guy.

They go out.

He breaks her heart.

They hate each other.

She cries for days on how "She made the biggest mistake ever"

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Thu May 13, 2010 3:28 pm

Yeah, but in mine, it's not like that, right? Like, cuz, my boy still likes her, but she's not sure what to say, so she runs off. It's like a Hatchet/TheClique

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Thu May 13, 2010 3:35 pm

Bluerivers wrote:: Yeah, but in mine, it's not like that, right? Like, cuz, my boy still likes her, but she's not sure what to say, so she runs off. It's like a Hatchet/TheClique

Yeah. Yours and mine are not like that at ALL.

Btw, Mieyon (Lol, I can't type today) we are not talking a your story, nor criticizing it. We are giving you tips on how to make your story different then other love stories. Like me and Blue's.

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Thu May 13, 2010 3:42 pm

Yeah, making it different isn't hard, you just put a spin on it that doesn't usually happen

Subject: Re: ~Love is Pain~ A Love Story Thu May 13, 2010 4:39 pm

Im SORTA writing a love story.
But its fantasy fiction and SPOILERSPOILERSPOILER.

XD

Former Staff Posts : 3165 Join date : 2010-01-27

Beauty26 wrote:

Bluerivers wrote:: Everyone's writing love stories lately...

Yeah.

Btw, wasn't I the first to write a love story here? Or was it you?

Actually, I think it was me, when I wrote, "A Sad, and Wonderful Life is On"

Oh wait, I just checked, and you made yours, then me, then Blue Razz

All of ours are different though.

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