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Weekays
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PostSubject: The good vs. Evil ( Story)   Sun Jul 22, 2012 6:04 am

Chapter 1 the terrible beggining:
 



NEW CHAPTERS OUT SOON! Please rate and tell me if i could improve so you can notice improvements in chapter 2 if this is a success im gonna try and get it published if my mother doesnt mind! Lol this may sound silly but if i cant get it publishdd im gonna still make it into a book and give copys too my friends Wink
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PostSubject: Re: The good vs. Evil ( Story)   Sun Jul 22, 2012 6:27 am

It's a great plot! I'm excited to read more,

I love it! The only critique I have is that there are a few capitalization and punctation errors. I could proofread it, but I would obviously miss a lot of things because I'm only ten and it wouldn't be very productive for me to do it. Maybe you could ask one of the older people on the forum to proofread it for you?

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PostSubject: Re: The good vs. Evil ( Story)   Sun Jul 22, 2012 9:58 am

Wat is proofread?
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PostSubject: Re: The good vs. Evil ( Story)   Sun Jul 22, 2012 12:04 pm

Weekays wrote:
Wat is proofread?
Read over it and fix the little mistakes.

It's a great start so far.

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PostSubject: Re: The good vs. Evil ( Story)   Sun Jul 22, 2012 12:58 pm

Thanks for telling me and thanks for saying its great owo

P.S im so in love with you avi lol
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PostSubject: Re: The good vs. Evil ( Story)   Sun Jul 22, 2012 1:07 pm

Weekays wrote:
Chapter 1 the terrible beggining:
 

I think I corrected all of them.
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PostSubject: Re: The good vs. Evil ( Story)   Sun Jul 22, 2012 1:47 pm

it is awesome but there are some spelling errors
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