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PostSubject: A little teensy bit of a story I wrote   Thu Nov 28, 2013 12:10 am

Hi everyone! This is a beginning of some story that has no name.
I was wondering if I should finish it or trash it?
Please note that I'm not a very experienced writer... Laughing 

The story:
 


Hi guys! I wrote a few more paragraphs today so check them out!
Oh and, please list some title ideas for my story. I know, I know, I haven't written enough for there to be a title yet, but it's bothering me how this story has no name :/
Anyway, enjoy!


       
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PostSubject: Re: A little teensy bit of a story I wrote   Thu Nov 28, 2013 12:59 am

I think you should continue it - I've read a ton of books, and the part about being normal comes up too often in my opinion, but that bit about the eyes is super funny. : D

Maybe it's just me, but I don't think there's anything wrong with the name Robyn, and I actually think it's pretty. : x
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PostSubject: Re: A little teensy bit of a story I wrote   Thu Nov 28, 2013 11:57 am

Thank you for your opinion Smile
I don't think there's anything wrong with the name either, but I couldn't come up with anything else. :/
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PostSubject: Re: A little teensy bit of a story I wrote   Thu Nov 28, 2013 1:33 pm

That's amazing I'm rubbish at writing stories I think you should keep it.
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PostSubject: Re: A little teensy bit of a story I wrote   Thu Nov 28, 2013 3:41 pm

you're a good writer! the verb tense is consistent, and i don't see any flaws in you grammar. there's nothing exciting or interesting plot-wise yet, but that might just be because you only have a few paragraphs. Smile
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PostSubject: Re: A little teensy bit of a story I wrote   Thu Nov 28, 2013 4:39 pm

LOL

I love the eyes part c:

It sounds like an interesting story!
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PostSubject: Re: A little teensy bit of a story I wrote   Thu Nov 28, 2013 7:45 pm

Hey guys I wrote a few more paragraphs so please read them! I think I'm going to continue this story and I'm going to put the new parts on this thread so stay tuned Smile
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PostSubject: Re: A little teensy bit of a story I wrote   Thu Nov 28, 2013 8:09 pm

Keep writting! This is good.
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PostSubject: Re: A little teensy bit of a story I wrote   Thu Nov 28, 2013 8:42 pm

If this were really a book I'd like to read it!
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PostSubject: Re: A little teensy bit of a story I wrote   Thu Nov 28, 2013 9:51 pm

Two teachers reminded me of this, that it's spelled "all right" and "alright" is slang or something somebody says. I think my teachers are stupid, though.

to the orthodontist.(I was getting my braces tightened. Fun stuff.)

Pretty good. I'd read a little more if it was a book. c:
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