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 [short story] The cat and the weasel

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**♥ Anni Hart♥**
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PostSubject: [short story] The cat and the weasel    Sat Oct 29, 2011 5:18 pm

The wise old cat said to the weasel one day " Hey weasel wanna have a eating race?" The selfish weasel said " Oh really old cat? I will do it then!" The cat said " Alright. Go to Maple path at 5:00." The weasel replied " Its on old cat!" A few hours later all the animals were cheering then the race started. The frog said "READY? SET GO!" The weasel ate with speed while the old cat took her time to eat slowly and took her time. The weasel shouted " TRY TO CATCH UP CAT!" The weasel laughed then he ran out of breath. " whew I'm going to take a break!" The weasel snored and flipped then the cat had pasted him with a smile. After 1 hour the weasel had finally woke up " Yawn! Huh? The race ended!?" The weasel who ate his fastest, " But how-?" The weasel was shocked as the cat said " Always take your time and don't take breaks. You learned your lesson weasel!"



My sister made this she just really wanted me to post this so i did ^u^


Last edited by **♥ Anni Hart♥** on Sat Oct 29, 2011 5:22 pm; edited 1 time in total (Reason for editing : I fixed some mistakes.)
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PostSubject: Re: [short story] The cat and the weasel    Sat Oct 29, 2011 5:19 pm

Nice story anni C:
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PostSubject: Re: [short story] The cat and the weasel    Sat Oct 29, 2011 5:20 pm

Nice story but you forgot to indent at the beginning
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PostSubject: Re: [short story] The cat and the weasel    Sun Oct 30, 2011 5:44 pm

It's cool, but you should add spaces after everyone talks. It makes it easier to read. xP

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PostSubject: Re: [short story] The cat and the weasel    Sun Oct 30, 2011 5:52 pm

Very nice. I've heard a diffrent version of it in a book or something before though. Its kinda similar.

Very nice though.
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PostSubject: Re: [short story] The cat and the weasel    Sun Oct 30, 2011 9:03 pm

It's good I guess, but its basically just a different version of The Tortoise and The Hare.
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PostSubject: Re: [short story] The cat and the weasel    Sun Oct 30, 2011 9:39 pm

xXLovestruckXx wrote:
It's good I guess, but its basically just a different version of The Tortoise and The Hare.

Thats what I was thinking of!
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PostSubject: Re: [short story] The cat and the weasel    Tue Nov 01, 2011 3:54 am

There are many stories on this, like the Hare and the Tortoise.
Good job! It's nice. c:
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PostSubject: Re: [short story] The cat and the weasel    Tue Nov 01, 2011 4:46 am

I Vote ''GOOD''

Nice Story <3
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PostSubject: Re: [short story] The cat and the weasel    Tue Nov 01, 2011 1:56 pm

The moral of the story itself isn't very original but the characters are a bit more original. Nice job for the most part ^^
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PostSubject: Re: [short story] The cat and the weasel    Tue Nov 01, 2011 1:59 pm

It's a pretty good retelling...I like it!
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