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PostSubject: School uniforms shouldn't be essential [SPEECH]   Sun Mar 25, 2012 9:20 pm

This is just a practice speech thing for debating :3
Please critique and if you would like to change anything, feel free to.
It's meant to be around 30s but I am got a bit over that.

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PostSubject: Re: School uniforms shouldn't be essential [SPEECH]   Sun Mar 25, 2012 9:21 pm

"Wearing school uniforms doesn’t make you any safer then not wearing school uniform. Crimes and theft will still happen at school."
That has nothing to do with the speech at all.

It's really short, maybe you could try adding in more descriptive details?

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PostSubject: Re: School uniforms shouldn't be essential [SPEECH]   Sun Mar 25, 2012 9:50 pm

Yes but the thing is it has to be around 30s
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PostSubject: Re: School uniforms shouldn't be essential [SPEECH]   Sun Mar 25, 2012 11:43 pm

I personally think this wasn't a very strong argument. You should put some better points in there.
I actually like school uniforms as long as they're comfortable, b/c there's less of a 'popularity contest' going on with looks & everything.
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PostSubject: Re: School uniforms shouldn't be essential [SPEECH]   Sun Mar 25, 2012 11:44 pm

That's true but the teacher set a topic and we had to do the negative side :3

What other points could I do, I couldn't think of any others.
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PostSubject: Re: School uniforms shouldn't be essential [SPEECH]   Mon Mar 26, 2012 12:08 am

I've had many projects in school dealing with debates, and if the teachers feel generous they allow you to choose what you'll be debating about. Usually I wouldn't be able to choose what I'm debating for, which made it more difficult if I didn't personally support it. To me it's like, CONTRADICT ALL THE THINGS!
Anyway, you're starting off with a nice argument, but like everyone else has been saying, it has to be lengthier. A debate like this has the potential to be a convincing one.
What I would do in debates is throw in a lot of evidence. For example, the part where you said that uniforms could be a financial problem for some families, that's something you can research. Like the percentage of families that have difficulty paying for uniforms, or if there's possibly any articles on that?
It sounds a bit silly, looking for facts on that aspect.. but that's why you're always able to provide details.
Why can't some families afford them? How much more difficult does this make it for the families, and how does that affect the school?
Why are uniforms useless?
It's kind of like an essay, lots of questioning and answering with a pinch of.. stalling.


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PostSubject: Re: School uniforms shouldn't be essential [SPEECH]   Mon Mar 26, 2012 12:17 am

Thank you so much :3


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PostSubject: Re: School uniforms shouldn't be essential [SPEECH]   Mon Mar 26, 2012 6:38 am

Off topic: EVERY SINGLE person in my school wears an uniform.
We don't even wear clothes on our birthday.
Last year some person who wasn't from our school entered the school saying it was her birthday, and that stopped it.
Even the kindergarteners wear it.
I'm usually used to wearing uniforms, so I'm typically against this post. It's just me. Sorry..


Good job on this! It's really good, but...uniforms don't cost so much. At my place it costs 2-5 dollars. Hundreds? You could change that bit.
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PostSubject: Re: School uniforms shouldn't be essential [SPEECH]   Mon Mar 26, 2012 6:46 am

This is a persuasive essay, correct? I've done one some-what like this, but it was to use a school uniform.
What I really have to say is that not all people feel uncomfortable
with uniforms. I mean, since I go to private school, I've used my uniform for years. I'm kind of used to it, plus, I don't have a lot of good clothes.
(((Note: I know this isn't about me. xD)))
Though, I thought uniforms were used to represent the school, or like if someone got lost, it would be easier to find them. (because their uniform represents that it's them)
Also try thinking of the positives before you write the negatives, or do a chart on the good and bad parts.
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PostSubject: Re: School uniforms shouldn't be essential [SPEECH]   Mon Mar 26, 2012 12:27 pm

The speech is really nice

stop bugging her >.<

u can put more stuff into the speech like why u dont need it
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PostSubject: Re: School uniforms shouldn't be essential [SPEECH]   Mon Mar 26, 2012 12:46 pm

so is this a speech or a debate? There's a difference.

Anyway I guess this is a speech.

Your points are good for the most part. And as for the length, you said it's about 30s so you don't wanna go to over board, and you might have end up doing that (unless your quick).

Also most uniforms aren't that much. You can usually buy the essentials pretty cheap. So that will be a weak point, the crime thing though is agreeable and I think it's usuable. One of the reasons my school district made a more strict dress code was because of that that and because they thought other clothing items were a distraction... which I think is ridiculous.

Will you be saying this in front of class o:?
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PostSubject: Re: School uniforms shouldn't be essential [SPEECH]   Mon Mar 26, 2012 5:36 pm

"In conclusion, I strongly believe that school uniforms should not be essential for school."
The first two words. Those are the absolute most unconvincing way to end your argument. There's plenty of supplements for 'in conclusion', instead of just saying that this is the end of it. Such as, as a result, to conclude, and there's more that you can just search up.

Make your conclusion a bit strong, and thirty seconds? That's really short for a speech, nevertheless a debate.

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PostSubject: Re: School uniforms shouldn't be essential [SPEECH]   Mon Mar 26, 2012 5:41 pm

Just saying School uniforms are for spirit and to show pride and respect Also Im sure another reason is, Not bullying, a few kids at my old school kids get bullied for there clothes Im sure thats a true statement but ive heard it happen.
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PostSubject: Re: School uniforms shouldn't be essential [SPEECH]   Tue Mar 27, 2012 1:24 am

@N, yeah it's not a proper one, our normal one when we do it against other schools are around 3 minutes.
@Aubrey, our uniforms over here cost around $90 for a normal one and $50 or so for a sport uniform
@Relora, no just the debating team
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