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PostSubject: Rollercoasters in Time- a story   Mon Dec 06, 2010 12:28 pm

I don't know if I'm good or not yet. Just read and feel free to comment!
Prologue:
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Chapter One: The Whole Beginning
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Chapter Two: A Weird Hotel
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In my opinion, the second chapter is a little weird to meh...


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PostSubject: Re: Rollercoasters in Time- a story   Mon Dec 06, 2010 12:37 pm

Pretty short prologue, but yeah "Never judge something by its first looks".
Looking for more... Smile
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PostSubject: Re: Rollercoasters in Time- a story   Mon Dec 06, 2010 1:15 pm

@FreedoM 4EVA

Yea, it is a pretty short prologue...

I'm working on chapter one! Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Rollercoasters in Time- a story   Mon Dec 06, 2010 2:01 pm

Well my prouloge to my story was pretty short. Never do judge. Really good. Interesting.
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PostSubject: Re: Rollercoasters in Time- a story   Mon Dec 06, 2010 5:06 pm

You know a prologue is actually like, an explanation to what has/will happen/ed...this says not much...
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PostSubject: Re: Rollercoasters in Time- a story   Mon Dec 06, 2010 5:23 pm

I like it! Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: Rollercoasters in Time- a story   Wed Dec 08, 2010 12:12 pm

Ok, I posted chapter one! Please, give me any suggestions on how to make my story better! Very Happy im working on chapter two! Smile
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PostSubject: Re: Rollercoasters in Time- a story   Wed Dec 08, 2010 6:04 pm

Anaira wrote:
You know a prologue is actually like, an explanation to what has/will happen/ed...this says not much...

Actually, a prologue is usually a chapter that takes place somewhere different than the rest of the story. It's not an explanation, it's more like a chapter that's slightly different from the rest.
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PostSubject: Re: Rollercoasters in Time- a story   Wed Dec 08, 2010 6:06 pm

I thought a proulouge was just a chapter before the other chapters, and is usually a bit briefer, and it gives abackground information without spoiling too much of the plot. I haven't heard of the "different setting" thing, though. You know what this means?

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A prologue (Greek πρόλογος prologos, from προ~, pro~ - fore~, and lógos, word), or prolog, is an opening to a story that establishes the setting and gives background details, often some earlier story that ties into the main one, and other miscellaneous information. The Greek prologos included the modern meaning of prologue, but was of wider significance, embracing any kind of preface, like the Latin praefatio.
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PostSubject: Re: Rollercoasters in Time- a story   Wed Dec 08, 2010 7:22 pm

Makkine wrote:
I thought a proulouge was just a chapter before the other chapters, and is usually a bit briefer, and it gives abackground information without spoiling too much of the plot. I haven't heard of the "different setting" thing, though. You know what this means?

TO GOOGLE!

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A prologue (Greek πρόλογος prologos, from προ~, pro~ - fore~, and lógos, word), or prolog, is an opening to a story that establishes the setting and gives background details, often some earlier story that ties into the main one, and other miscellaneous information. The Greek prologos included the modern meaning of prologue, but was of wider significance, embracing any kind of preface, like the Latin praefatio.

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PostSubject: Re: Rollercoasters in Time- a story   Thu Dec 09, 2010 12:23 pm

Pretty good Chapter (1). I do write stories (short ones) and I'm not a great writer, but I found some sentences built up in a weird way. I don't know did I understand these sentences wrong or what. Not offending you in any way, but small things may help Smile
Looking forward for more...

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PostSubject: Re: Rollercoasters in Time- a story   Sun Dec 12, 2010 10:57 am

Ok, I posted Chapter Two. It's kinda weird in my opinion...
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PostSubject: Re: Rollercoasters in Time- a story   Sun Dec 12, 2010 1:10 pm

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PostSubject: Re: Rollercoasters in Time- a story   Mon Dec 13, 2010 10:07 am

sissy, you have officially confused meh.. Question

Edit: Sighs. sissy, you have messed up the page.


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PostSubject: Re: Rollercoasters in Time- a story   Mon Dec 13, 2010 10:16 am

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Please, edit your post. YOU STRETCHED THE PAGE. Mad

If she refuses, can a mod do it? The page stretching made it almost impossible to read the story.
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